Bathing with a dictionary!

It's wonderful to use an elevated vocabulary, but don't use so many uncommon words to the point where the reader would want to go bathe with their dictionary.

Example:

Baekhyun woke up and noticed a phosphorecent light permeating throught his window. Then he put his feet on the frigid ground that made it feel like his feet were benumbed by the tile and lethargically made his way to the bathroom. Looking in the mirror, he expeditiousy was cognizant of how abhorrent his countenance was.

Basically, he woke up to a bright light from his window, got out of bed and went to the bathroom and realized how terrible he looked.

I just noped at the word phosphorecent.

Thanks to thesaurus.com for providing me with the words found in the paragraph above that made me want to barf out mini dictionaries. Or thesauruses.

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iexoeris #1 Sep 15, 2018 17:39:21

Chapter 41: In chapter 41, the first sentence is grammatically incorrect. In the first sentence, the 'me' should be 'my' instead. It is a very common mistake that I see, even in popular books. I think this grammar rule will change. Also, I am in middle school too and I love EXO. PS- Rick Riordan is my favourite writer. Did you fall in love with PJO, HOO, TOA, Kane Chronicles or Magnus Chase?

tokyeoul #2 Feb 25, 2016 09:58:38

Chapter 36: This is what I call fun in learning! This is a really good, humorous, straight-to-the-point guide (I made sure that I used correct punctuation on that sentence okay). You are way younger than me but I am just a newbie writer so this helped me a lot. I am still not finished and I am actually reading this at midnight. No surprise there haha! Anyway, thank you so so much!

BaekYeolChanBaek #3 Jan 10, 2016 01:35:37

DUDE WE'RE THE SAME AGE

JKNewsandDavidSo #4 Dec 5, 2015 21:35:35

Chapter 55: Lol Alternate Universe if you haven't found out it the few months that you've written this chapter xD

JKNewsandDavidSo #5 Dec 4, 2015 02:02:54

Chapter 19: Wow middle school, what grade r u now? I'm in middle school too!

LeaMon #6 Sep 12, 2015 05:44:31

I know right, when people don't capitalize properly, spell properly, has bad punctuation or use bad grammar, I immediately stop, because my eyes hurt. I became a grammar nazi, because whenever my friends and I use bad grammar or those other things, she subtracts our discipline points. Now, the things I mentioned above will just make me annoyed and somehow judge people quietly... It's pretty bad, but I can't help it.

hermion8 #7 Aug 10, 2015 12:00:02

Chapter 58: Just dropping by to say I totally agree with what you wrote. I tried to write something like this before, although unfortunately, I lost my list of commonly misused words and had to focus on college. Maybe I'll resurrect that soon...
One thing I hate the most though, aside from mid-chapter POV shifts and profiles, is when the author tries to excuse not proofreading by saying "English is not my first language." I understand that not everyone perfects grammar and all, especially one they don't use all the time, but proofreading is a way to learn, right?
I'm babbling here. Haha. I hope more people actually read things like this... There are a lot of plots with potential but... :/

dreamshade #8 Jul 10, 2015 22:32:17

Chapter 57: I'm gonna miss this and you, too. Hope that you'll come back and give me and the others more useful tips in writing fanfic. Thank you for sharing too ^^

MissLalaMoon #9 May 21, 2015 22:04:00

Chapter 28: I agree with this. It really annoys me when I see some Korean words that are simple to use in English (does that even make sense?). One time the entire sentence was in Korean and I had no idea what they were saying. I thought at the end of the chapter they we going to explain what they said, but they didn't. So I stopped reading the story, since most of the story consisted of the characters talking in Korean and I could not stand it. The only Korean word you could say that I use a lot is “yah” since it has been in my vocabulary even before I got into KPOP. I use some other ones, even though I don't like to, but sometimes when I write it English it looks weird. But I don't write full sentences, it just looks odd and I don't even know how to. I only know (and use) the simple terms such as “oppa,” “hyung,” “umma,” and etc.

Milielitre #10 May 21, 2015 02:40:16

Chapter 55: au stands for Alternate Universe, a story in which your characters are not what they are in real life. The opposite would be cannon, or alternate reality, a story in which your characters are still idols.