Broken from Thought
A Fan Fiction Writer's GuideMost of the time when a character is thinking, they are then torn away from their thoughts because someone else talked. That's usually the amateur transition because the author doesn't know how to smoothly transition otherwise, and hey, you're not alone. I used it in the past, but I have grown as a writer and have strayed away from that.
If you don't know what I'm talking about, here's an example:
What motives did Luxan have anyway? Once he completely took over Luhan's vessel and oppressed the latter, then what would he do with the immense power? It was all so strange to Sehun and he was still trying to wrap his head around the thought, but his thoughts were interrupted when someone began to talk.
"Hey, Sehun," Luhan called out.
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I haven't made a transition like that in so long and I kind of forgot how to. Anyway, here's what you can do without the interrupted thoughts transition:
What motives did Luxan have anyway? Once he completely took over Luhan's vessel and oppressed the latter, then what would he do with the immense power? It was all so strange, really. What, with Luhan becoming his vinculum after Kai disappeared; Luxan being conscious inside the vessel; and the destiny to save heaven. Sehun was only 17 for God's sake! How could he take on such a job?
"Hey, Sehun," Luhan called out softly and put a gentle--almost tentative--hand on the younger's tense shoulder. Sehun glanced up from his intense stare down with a tulip and relaxed upon seeing Luhan's angelic face.
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Ok, I know I went overboard with the writing and such, but I plan on making it a story anyway so I just kind of got into it. The point is the transition. In the first one, it uses the amateur "broken from thought" while in the second one, it goes straight to dialogue. I mean, on occasions, the first way is acceptable, but only once or twice. Do not overuse it. Get creative! I don't think I've read any book with the first transition, so that should say to you: yes, it's possible to transition easily in another way.
By the way, vinculum is Latin for bond. I didn't want to say bond because that would be fricken boring anyway.
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