Stupidly in Love

by: Baboboo

Before the review, I just wanted to ask - being in Singapore, isn't English one of the the country's main languages? This question is simply for future purposes so that I'll take being a native/non-native speaker more into account. Thank you and sorry for that. Read on to see what I thought of your story.

Characterization (20 Pts)

The characters you had were all great, at least the main one's. The problem I had with the story in regards to its characters, was that you had four main characters - Seohyun, Yuri, Luhan and Sehun. However, you mostly spoke about the previous three and not the latter. It felt like Seohyun, Yuri, and Luhan were the main characters and not all four.

The reason I thought it was this way was because I was able to gauge the personalities of the three and not of Sehun.

Seo Joohyun was realistic: when Yuri and Sehun got together, she kept her job and was being professional, choosing to create a line between her work and personal lives.

Kwon Yuri was a perfectionist: being more American than Korean, she speaks slowly so that she'll be able to prevent silly mistakes when speaking.

Luhan was empathetic: taking an interest in Joohyun, he decides to agree to marry her.

Sehun: No real focus. Apart from being a model, and constantly whispering Seohyun's name in his sleep - I didn't know much about him. Even if you include that issue with him cheating on Seohyun, it didn't really reveal much of his personality.  

Score:  13/20

Plot (20 Pts)

The general plot you have is linear which is good because it is easy to follow. You have established a conflict with these "four" main characters but you are prolonging some kind of resolution. I know you want to create a long story but it has been 16 chapters and still there's no resolution on this whole Seohyun and Sehun thing.