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by: imyourbestfriend24
Pardon the mediocre review, Your story was pretty much great - I had no words and it took me a while to formulate my thoughts. There aren't really any criticisms because your plot and writing are superb. Anyways, read on to see what I thought of your story <3.
Characterization (20 Pts)
Your portrayal of this innocent young woman who fell in love with her big brother was just so profound. It brought me to tears. Eunji's personality was revealed in pieces and although her admiration for Jonghyun dominated / what made up her whole presence in the story, your astonishing word choice gave the readers a glimpse of who she really was. Although Jonghyun's characterin this one-shot had more of a supporting role (in that he lad less lines, but was the main focus), he was still able to receive sympathy from the readers. At one point, you were also clever in twisting some words and shifting their meaning and actually giving readers hope in that Jonghyun may love Eunji back only to be later revealed not to be the case. The withdrawal of details is praise worthy and your general execution in describing the characters was great.
The description of the characters were on point. They were realistic and they acted accordingly.
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