Hello, Lovelies!

So, I re-read this story, and I asked my friends, who don't own an AFF account, to read this. They really liked it, but most of their comments made me ponder. 

1. Lay's a jerk.

2. Roxanne seemed to be a static character.

3. What exactly did they sacrifice?

First off, I can understand why readers would think Lay's a jerk, but I do have a reminder that there was a few-years gap. And Roxanne was mostly focused during that gap and not Lay. Therefore, we don't really know what happened to him during those years. I made a proclomation to one of my friends that perhaps, I might make a mini story for Lay so people can understand him more. And I honestly thought that I did a good job to emphasize both perspective of Lay and Roxanne, but as I re-read it, there seemed to be empty spots for both the characters that were not developed, which would result to readers not understanding them as much. So I guess, I did not.

Secondly, I honestly like Roxanne as a character that I made, but I mean, all authors love their characters, right? However, there's always room for improvement. I have to admit that on the last chapter, Roxanne was fairly irratating. And she was basically the opposite of what I wrote in her description, but I have to give it to her. She was depresed, but I also have to say that Roxanne didn't have that much spotlight as a protagonist in the beginning. Maybe, I should try switching to first perspective instead of third? Or maybe I shouldn't treat the third persepective as if someone's telling the story rather it's simply in third perspective. I hope, that made sense. 

Third, their sacrifice was when they made love in their last night. Lay was leaving to China, and he was engaged. However, his first love comes by, and that is when he could have easily threw away his fiancee and start all over again with Roxanne. Also, Roxanne could have let Lay ruin his morals by breaking the engagement and selfishly have Lay to herself. However, none of that happened. Roxanne let Lay go to China to be married, and Lay left Roxanne so that she can be free to do what she wants that doesn't have to do with him. Now, personally, I see as a strong action of love, and I see it as a gift to be given during marriage. For me, my plan is to have after marriage, but for others, if it's in their case, I see it as a strong action of love. In this case, Lay missed Roxanne. Roxanne missed Lay. It was their last night. Why not show their love for each other by having ? No, there's a better term. They made love. So that was their sacrifice. However, I do have to say that this may have offended some of my friends, and I have to admit that they could have suggested doing something else that doesn't seem as if it's screwed up. The situation mostly offended some of my friends, because Lay was engaged, but we don't really know the situation between Lay and his fiancee. It could be a facade. It could be for family business. It could probably be a threat ( I'm just over exagerating to get my point across). Who knows? 

Now, this story was completely written just for the sake of writing, but since I see potential - a lot of potential - in this story, I will probably re-write all of it and definitely edit it with more effort. I'll still keep the plot, but I'll mostly enhance the characters more. And perhaps, I might change the perspective. 
Also, one of my friends really likes Kai. I saw him as a hopeless romantic guy, who's a complete idiot, but she's making me like him a bit more now. If people are interested even after I'm done re-writing this. I might - strongly might - make a small story just for Kai. 

I know a lot of people in AFF may not read this story, but I'll still keep the poll here. Because I might not re-write this right away. So here you go!

Alright, Lovelies, that's all I have to say. If you do feel offended by my words, go ahead and say it, but I meant no harm whatsoever (: 
I enjoyed the story myself, but I hope you all enjoyed it too. 
So then, aideu, Lovelies!