//Ntaecola
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Ntaecola || Phaethon; Up In Flames
reviewed by: MiyuChan
Title: [15/20]
Though it was definitely eye-catching and intriguing, it was not your own title; also, replace the semicolon with a colon. The 'in' is not capitalized.
Foreword/Description: [08/10]
I would have gave you full points, but the author's note would have looked better in the foreword.
Plot and Originality: [15/30]
Since it was not your own idea, half-credit.
Language: [06/10]
There were some problems in your dialogue. Always end dialogue with either a period, comma, exclamation mark, and question mark.
Characterization: [19/20]
Good job.
Flow: [09/10]
Good job.
Total: [72/100]
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