//GreenGardenPop
✔City Lights Review Shop // BATCH ONE CLOSED
Title: [15/20]
Cliche and common; it wouldn't really catch a reader's eye. However, it does connect to your story, and that's the main focus of having a title.
Foreword/Description: [10/10]
How are you doing this to me? I love your description; simple and sweet. Doesn't reveal too much, but it doesn't give too little, either.
Your foreword was also amazing. I loved the poem; full points for you.
Plot and Originality: [24/30]
Ugh, the originality was definitely not original; it was so cliche. Really? She gets leukemia? Thank God you didn't make her die at the end, though.
Even though it was cliche, the plot was okay and you followed it very well.
Language: [10/10]
I saw no mistakes. Good job!
Characterization: [19/20]
Amazing characterization. Perhaps the flow of their love went a bit to fast? Maybe it's just me.
Flow: [07/10]
Again, perhaps the flow of their love went a bit too fast.
Total: [85/100]
I enjoyed your story, however, the cliche plot made my happiness go a tad bit down.
If there are any questions, please contact MiyuChan! Thanks for requesting!
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