CupieCakesx3 : The Devil Beside Me
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reviewed by Jangmii
*old rubric*
Title (3/5) :
The title was average. Sure, it was somewhat revelant to the story, it didn't spark an interest or anything.
Description&Foreword (7/10) :
The description was very vague and it didn't really give me much of a preview of the story. On addition, the foreword and the description should be swapped. The foreword was off, too. It said they were married in the end, but they are, in fact, engaged.
Content&Plot (6/10) :
Your chapters are rather short, they're probably around 500-600 words, or less. But you're ending the chapters on good timings. The plot.. I think it's weird. They're 21 but they're in what seems like high school.
Characters (7/10) :
You should voice out the person of view's thoughts more. It would give more depth, right now everything's rather vague. That would also assist you in lengthening your chapters without dragging things on.
Grammar&Spelling (8/10) :
Your grammar is normally fine and so is your spelling. But it's not fluid; it's rather choppy. Another thing is, when you do '???!' or something similar, you should really just stick to '?!' or '!?' instead. In addition, when someone's yelling, you should refrain from using capslock and use italics or something else instead.
Organization (2/5) :
A lot of the time you're either contradicting and/or repeating yourself.
Enjoyment (7/10) :
It's not that this is a bad story, but it's not a great story either. It's average. A few fixes here and there would improve it a bit. Maybe it's how you're delivering the story, maybe it's the plot itself. I'm not really sure. It's not a story I would subscribe to.
Total : 40/60 -- 67%
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