Chapter 2: Omg Ai this is amazing !!!
I love love it.
I love how you describe the surrounding it was so easy to imagine and live it. I can feel the heat, light, cold and darkness.
The first chapter made me confuse as he'll but it made sense in this second.
Is it out of body experience what's happening to baekhyun?
It happened to me once where I was staring at myself sleeping, terrified the out of me and never happened again.
I think there's something different in baekhyun that has a thing to do with the sun and coldness and his mother knows about it.
I'm really really curious now
YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE I WILL NAG YOU FOREVER UNTIL YOU FINISH IT !
Your writing is so much better than I thought (sorry)

Aiii, I really liked your writing. I want to encourage you to write cause definitely you have talent, in my opinion and I think you can do great. Your language is very beautiful and it was very pleasant to read you. It obviously goes beyond fanfic, so please keep it up!

I see you have few subscribers/upvotes. That's how aff works, although Ive not been around for too long I can tell people tend to prefer easy reading and a story that unfolds fast, like if there's nothing happening quickly they would give up reading, which is understandable if you're here for the baekyeol (and that's ok), but as I told you earlier at least for me this is much better and more satisfying. I liked how we don't know wth is going on at the begining, and how soon it doesn't matter, cause I started to focus on sensations and I loved to imagine every little detail you described, like the ground, the sky, the air, and how all that gave me a portrayal of your character without having him to speak too much. I think you have your own style and I love that everyone here has theirs, there's no such thing as a better or worse one I think, but the fact that you find yours and work on it is what matters. I also liked how you inserted that initial fragment repeatedly, cause it started to make more sense each time, and that you made little changes to it so as it is actually happening again and is not just recalling... Time works in an amazing way in your story.

Chapter 2: Baekhyun's mom is DEFINITELY hiding something from him and I wonder why. I just have to say that I absolutely LOVE the way you describe the setting and the feelings. The way you described Chanyeol was perfect and I could imagine him just like it. It was awesome :)
I look forward to your next update ^^

YOU UPDATED , YAAAY !
I can feel everything is connected and at some point in the story, everything will make sense. I'm excited and curious about what will come next. I feel something is going on with Baekhyun's mom and Park Ji Sun (who, i assume, has a link with chanyeolo park ?) and they both know important stuff. So mysterious !
Also, I feel like your writing style has changed a little in a positive way. It improved ! The descriptions were great and I can almost feel the sun on my skin (even though i'm inside, and the sky is cloudy) from them. So yeah, really nice work !

Chapter 1: I really loved the description! There was just something about it that made me want to read it.
Why didn't his mom want him to drink? Well, all moms don't want us to drink but I'm sure she has a reason for it. His mom is so sweet and kind, I love her already.
I'm looking forward to your next update ^^

Chapter 1: I loved the description (°∀°)b It was nice detailed, gurl !
I'm glad you didn't compress the story in an one-shot.
Poor Baekhyunnie, something about him makes me sad. His mom seems to be a sweetheart.
I'm intrigued ≖‿≖ I'm lookinf forward the next chapter. Fighting peanutos !♥