Review

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T i t l e ❧  3.5/5 

The title made me smile as I imagined a couple that was deeply in love, willing to do anything for each other and this doesn’t happen often. I’m unable to tell so far whether or not your title has any connection with the story and I urge you to somehow implement some kind of link soon, otherwise the title and story will become disconnected. But overall, I think you picked a nice, kind of cutesy (in my opinion) name. 

P o s t e r & B a c k g r o u n d ❧ 2.5/5 b u l g e s

There wasn’t a poster, nor a background to comment on and I did not like this. You should request a poster from a graphic shop as, surprisingly, it really seems to amp up any story and gives a visual appeal. The mind then has more to soak in and is not just restricted to words. I did give you some points however, for the SM banner.

P l o t & o r i g i n a l i t y ❧ 4/5  t h i g h s

There are many stories involving idols that go to high school, or whatever educational facility, yet I felt there was a difference with yours. I can’t pin point it exactly but I have a feeling it may be because of all the characters you used and of their roles or family status. I can feel your story edging easily into something interesting and this fact alone made me want to read on. I don’t usually read school life stories, but yours I liked. 

G r a m m a r & s p e l l i n g ❧ 10/10 b u t t s

I am terribly sorry about this review taking so long, so I posted the majority of it. I hope that is okay? I will PM you when this section has been completed. 

W r i t i n g  s t y l e & s t o r y  f l o w ❧ 4/5  a b s

I really like your writing style as you do take time to describe things without going overboard. Your stories were a nice length and did not drag on. You also added in a small cliff hanger which sent me straight to the button “next”. For this, I applaud you. A lot of writers struggled with adding in things like suspense, yet you did it perfectly. You also represented the nice little vocabulary that you have stored away! 

C h a r a c t e r i z a t i o n ❧ 3.5/5 n e c k  v e i n s 

I feel like I am beginning to get to know your main character quiet well and slowly I am piecing together the clues that you leave behind, building up the final imagine of what the character actually is like. I couldn’t give you higher marks however, because there are so many characters and so little chapters that I reviewed. I am sure that as your story progresses, the reader and I, will learn more about everyone and get to know their traits and reasoning. I can see much potential for each character and I have a hunch that you will be able to paint them perfectly. 

O v e r a l l  e n j o y m e n t ❧ 80/100  

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