Review

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              ⇨My Fear is Betrayal || HansolLover || ByuntaePotato ⇦                     Set, 

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T i t l e ❧  4/5 

I will admit, the type was somewhat eye catching and I haven’t seen any familiar to this. However, and I will bring this up later in the review, I feel that betrayal is the wrong word for your story. As I said, I will elaborate below. But overall, the title flows well and made me curious as to what I was about to read.

P o s t e r & b a c k g r o u n d ❧ 1/ 5 b u l g e s

There is no poster to be commented on and for this, I urge you to get one. A poster, surprisingly, makes a story much more appealing as they have something other than words to absorb. It also elevates your story to a much more professional level. I will reward you one point, though because of the picture of Tiger.

P l o t & o r i g i n a l i t y ❧ 4.5/5 t h i g h s

This is quiet original and I haven’t seen many stories or drabbles that followed the same path as yours. I almost wish that this was a story but I get that you only wanted to create a drabble. 

G r a m m a r & s p e l l i n g ❧ 4/5 b u t t s

You had no spelling mistakes! Good job!

I can’t give you a perfect score because of the fact that I believe you used the wrong word; betrayal. If I interpreted your story correctly, then the characters friend does not betray her. I don’t understand how Zain changed besides the fact she wouldn’t talk to the character. Did Zain discover how the character liked to take over her friends?  I’m sorry but I’m really not sure. 

s t o r y  f l o w  & w r i t i n g  s t y l e ❧ 9.5/10 a b s

The flow seemed to work really well and I liked the way that you added the spaces between certain sections. I think that you could have written a little bit more or made the paragraphs slightly longer, but overall it was good. 

I really like how you described the situation in a completely different way than usual. It made the drabble enjoyable and interesting to read. I can easily tell, just from this, that your other stories would be well written and flow really well. You describe things just enough without going overboard and I felt like I connected with the main character. Double thumbs up!

C h a r a c t e r i z a t i o n ❧ 5/5  n e c k  v e i n s 

I was surprised with how well I understood the character with only the use of a few words. This showed me that you have a good grasp on how to use words correctly and how to strategically place them. Well done. 

O v e r a l l  e n j o y m e n t ❧ 85/100  

The fact that I didn’t think the word betrayal connected with the story resulted in a slight mark down as, because of that, I was slightly confused. I don’t really read drabbles either and I felt that it was too short. If you have the time, I think that you should create a chapter story or even one shot out of this.

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A/N :  I hope that I didn't sound too harsh and I hope you are satisfied with your review! Please, credit the shop appropriately!