Critique, Thanks, and Compromise

OTL

Critique by awesomegurl4815 

Title: OTL

Author: amusingmurdermachine

Reviewer: awesomegurl4815

Title  3/10: You could have done a better title. People would need the title to let them know what the story's about. Your title isn't the best one. Probably a title that could tell it's a computer love story would work. I know you're not the best with titles so yeah. (By the way, I have no idea what OTL means)

Poster/Background  1/10: It's a very pretty background. I just love it. The reason I gave you a one is because it doesn't match with your story at all. I know it was in chapter 6 but it's not like it's going to be important in the story, is it?

Writing Errors/Grammar   8/10:
I saw some words that are misspelled. There were also some words that weren't even words. For example, in chapter 5, hanged is really supposed to be hung. I'm wondering, what does "Jelsunghamnida" mean? Otherwise, the punctuation is good and everything else is fine.


Enjoyment 10/10: I totally enjoyed it. It's cute and adorable. I just love it. Keep up the good work.

Writing Style  10/10: It's so colorful and cute and I just love it. You put a lot of creativity into your writing. Also, I love how you put quotation marks instead of doing the thingamajig that's like this------>  person's name: whatever they are saying right now.
Awesomegurl4815: Congrats! You have a ten out of ten!

Bonus  10/10: I don't really do this part. But, congrats! You got a ten out of ten!


Total:   87/100


Reviewer's Comment: Thanks for choosing me! Let me just say that I'm new at this so I may have gotten a few things wrong. I'm sorry and to all those other reviewer, please don't kill me for this. *Clears throat* It's a very cute and and tremendous story. I absolutely adore it. By the way, I just love the EPIC FAIL picture on the forewords plus the family portrait on the first chapter. It was awesome. Keep up the good work. Oh, and let me just say that you might want to be a little more specific on the description. Also, sorry if I sounded harsh in any way. I'm pretty sure that I didn't sound like that. I'm wondering, why is it that one of the tags say one shot? Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter. Also, I can't forget to say this one thing. And that things is...

PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!

Thank you, awesomegurl4815. :)

( Do check out her review and oneshot request shop here. )

 Formal Thanks:

 SUBSCRIBERS:

 Iceprincess

twix28

sarang

awesomgurl4815

ekyuri

carayuki

SweetKpop

 

PEOPLE WHO COMMENTED:

twix28

guardian_angel274

sarang

dorkyleaders

SweetKpop

 

CRITIC:

awesomegurl4815

 

      ...and silent readers. If there were. =_=

And now for Taeyeon and Kangin's salutations...

 

 

  

"Just great. Epic failure."

"Ulijima. It’s okay."

"It’s the title isn’t it?"

 

 

"Well, yeah…"

"I knew it."

 

The Compromise.

 

Well, I see you guys want some TeukYeon...

And...this one didn't go really well...

 

So I'm going to write it.

 

Uh-huh. Yup.

 

It may take a while, but uh...I do hope you guys would still support. :)

 

 

'Till then...

 

 

Buh-bye. ^_^

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TheNightDeer #1
i like it nice story
JOYCEpotatooo #2
Woaaah. I didn't expect it to be KangYeon! I thought it was a TaeTeuk/TeukYeon fanfic. But anyways, subways, highways, *lol, corny* I love this! It's so original and this is also my first KangYeon fic I read. I usually don't read SuperGeneration ff but I really enjoy this one. It's so cute and the ending is unexpected. ^^

And, Kangin is back! Gaaah, love it <3 He's so handsome and cool and kyaaaa I can't even x)
amusingmurdermachine #3
@dorkyleaders: Omo. I'm so sorry. =_= But I'm working on a Teukyeon fic right now... ^_^<br />
@SweetKpop: ^_^ Thanks.<br />
@Lambtastic: Yey! Someone is happy with this fic. ^_^ Omo. I'm missing Kangin more and more... =_=
Lambtastic #4
Yay taeyeon got with kangin. He finally wins! Every other kangin story I read had him as the bad guy. I am so glad he apologised and everything worked out:)
SweetKpop #5
I like it but i think i am in the teuk teuk team :P. Nice story
SweetKpop #6
Lmao @ the family pic. < PRESSING THE NEXT BUTTON> :)
dorkyleaders #7
aaah.... i thought it will be taeteuk... T_____T
amusingmurdermachine #8
@guardian_angel274: I will try. Thanks for anticipating. ^_^ ...and for commenting. ^_^<br />
@sarang: Thank you so much. ^_________^<br />
@twix28: Hi there, dongsaeng. :D I see you're torn like me. Thanks for your support by the way. :)<br />
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<br />
It's really nice of you guys to comment in here. :)<br />
Mianhae, cause I'll be updating late. My hard-drive got wiped out recently, so there. I'll really try to post the final installation of this uh...three-shot...sometime soon.<br />
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^_______^
OkNerd #9
No no this is really good people are really missing out! (:<br />
I dunno if i'm on team kangin or team leeteuk. Lol xD
sarang #10
lmao that family pic @_____@<br />
the story is really good; idk why more people aren't reading it but they're missing out hehe<br />
update soon :D<br />
fighting~
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