NEVER REGRET LOVING YOU

by itzmeaina

Title : [4/5]

It's interesting, invites me to read. but i think i've seen at least two of fanfics with a title like this. common, i might say.

Forewords : [5/10]

I like how you don't describe the characters at the foreword, it makes the readers expecting their characters by reading from the chapters.

you don't have to explain too much about the storyline at the description, it's just like a spoiler to the readers, and reduced the fun of reading. like in the description, you wrote that Jihyun will bickering with anti fans and Jinyoung saw it. you could just change it to : "something brought the two of them to meet at an unpredictable event" -> it could makes the readers interested, thinking about what is the 'something'.

and for me, i kinda like the quotes on the foreword. though the images are kinda annoying, at least for me, but it's still acceptable.

Characteristics of the Characters : [10/20]

since it's a four-shot, i see that you didn't really describe the characters. but through the action. i can understand that Jinyoung is brave enough to save the Jihyun. Jinhyun is also brave enough to shout at the anti fans, but at the end, she's still weak to be scared and cry. but it's more interesting if the antifans could act more like an antifans. i mean, they're antifans, right? they shouldn't be afraid of Jinyoung. well, that's my opinion.

and the other B1A4 members, you could described them as the playful and childish members. a point for this.

but this thing kinda bother me :

Jinyoung thought this : "We are no longer in a relationship anymore; I shouldn't mind her problem, right?" but at the end he still saved her. so he's the indecisive one?

Story Flow : [8/15]

great enough. it didn't make me bored, at least i can read all the 4 chapters in one shot, because it's interesting. how Jinyoung is down because he missed Jihyun, and how Jihyun meet the antifans when she tried to go to Jinyoung. and btw, i think it's funny that the four other members are just watching when Jihyun is in danger. :p

Story Idea : [5/10]

it's kinda common, a couple who broke up, but still love each other and ended up dating again at the end. but since you added the antifans scene, it's a plus point, it makes the story more interesting to read.

Grammar / Spelling : [10/20]

I spotted some grammar mistakes. well, i'm not an expert on this too, but it's bother me when i noticed it. let me tell you some :

Jinyoung [is] still [in] love [with] Jihyun, so does Jihyun.

 

They broke up because they [were] fighting about something silly.

[final] …” he added as he lowering[ed] his gaze.

Jinyoung [was] surprise[d] [as] she accept his apologize

[and some other mistakes that i saw yesterday but couldn't find anymore today]

but i can still understand what you meant, and enjoy reading this, so it's acceptable. just practice with the grammar by reading more fanfics.

 

Writing style : [3/5]

good enough. i can understand, and enjoy reading.

but my opinion is. you can merge all the chapters into a oneshot right? kkk..it's up to you actually, but each chapters are too short. at least for me :p

Curiosity of reading more : [5/10]

yep, it's there. as it's actually a one day event, divided into 4 shots, righty?

Originality : [5/5]

since i never read something so similar with this, it's original.

Bonus [3/5]

+1 you added my Channie there as a cameo

+2 I enjoyed reading this

 

Total : [58/105]

Grade : C \

 

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Annyeong Everyone~~ I request a review(My first time request a review x3 lol) and post it~ Hehe, I got 58/105~ Grade C~ it means my grammer is bad~ :D lol

Since I know what my weakness now, I will try to improve my weaknesses and make the best in future~~~ x3

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