Chapter 8: Usually, I don’t like vulnerable characters because they remind me that there are weakness in people and I’d like to believe that I’m above them. But I liked the scene where Hyesun was talking with her therapist! I wonder what makes her feel so insecure, and who Ms. Bang and Yoora are. I hope that Hyesun won’t be treated like a weak little thing when she’s introduced to the pack and I hope she gets her powers or witchy senses soon. I feel like that’s what connects her to Lamia, or the woman in her dream.
Is the therapist part of the pack? Is she going to tell Baekhyun about Hyseun’s insecurities? I feel like I remember something like this in the old version? Or did I mix it with a different story? Hehehe, can’t remember!
I’m excited to read more!
Chapter 7: I remember why I stopped reading it, lmao. It was because of the politics. I hate hate hate politics. I usually try to deviate from it in real life and I don’t read fics that focus on this regime.
Now I understand that Yubin indeed was acting as if she doesn’t know Baekhyun.
I’m curious about how he’d approach the girl XD
I admit that I didn’t like to read the part about Yeri. Their mindsets kind of disgusted me and I couldn’t make myself read more so I skimmed over the chapter.
This story is already evoking so many feelings out of me omfg
Chapter 4: Hasn’t Yubin been the same witch that Baekhyun talked to the previous chapter? So isn’t she familiar with him already? Her questions to Chanyeol feel kind of confusing; unless it’s a ploy of hers to keep Hyesun oblivious.
It feels weird that EVERYONE knows what the heck is going on aside Hyesun. Is her father a hunter or something? Is that why he seemed to know what was happening while she wasn’t? Hmm, so many questions!
(EDIT) is she having dreams of Lamia, the resurrected vampire, in her own dreams? Hmm, I wonder what their connection is! I have a feeling Lamia would end up being a good person, seeing that she has had so many emotions shown in this chapter.
Chapter 3: Hm, there are a few things I’m confused about; and I’m not sure if it’s me not noticing the answers to them or if if it was not explained.
Why were the elders punished? Junmyeon and Baekhyun’s parents? And what did Baekhyun mean when he talked to Kim Teahyung and pointed out Sehun to tell him he didn’t understand? I felt like a when I didn’t understand the implication behind his words, lol.
So far, I like where the story is heading! There are too many characters to keep up with and it’s giving me a headache, lol, but I’m sure things will play out smoothly as we go through the story.
Chapter 2: Hello!
I have read this story before when you were still updating it. It feels like such a long time has passed. I even upvoted it!
I don’t remember what reason it was, perhaps it was the quick pace at the first chapters. I really don’t remember; but I stopped reading it. For a while, I kept going in and out of this, not knowing whether I should read it again or what (the mind is a very strange place lmao) but now I finally gathered my courage and began to read it again! I really have high hopes for this. I adore fantasy and the general setup of your fic is superb!
Chapter 8: Sorry for the late response, but this is the first time i've been on my computer in the past few days and finally getting around to reading this. First of all, this Hyesun is already giving off major future development vibes. I love being able to get more details on her past life, just so we can get to know her more. Knowing what her 'nightmares' are about makes it so much interesting. But like, isn't it somewhat weird for her to live through the experiences from her 'nightmares', since she's extremely close to Yeri.
I'm already feeling upset for Hyesun. She trusts that witch so much. Can't wait to find out more about Hyesun.
I'm really enjoying the revamped version, it's so good and i really just want to keep reading, even when i know what's coming up next.
Chapter 8: So let me say this first.. If the old version was best then this one is bestest.. Two new things I noted.. First Yubin know about her nightmares.. If I am correct then in old version Hyesun told her later.. When she went to her home I think? And second her nightmares..this time it is more detailed..in old one her dreams related to Lamia wasn't this detailed at first as her dreams about Issandra.. I don't know I could be wrong too.. Also while reading the part where she talking about her nightmares gave me this idea.. In sequel she formed this frenemy kinda relationship with Sehun.. So maybe there could be a moment where they have a deep talk about anything and everything when she will tell him about this.. That she relived his and Lamia's whole life like this when she didn't even knew anything about otherworld.. That how they got connected when he didn't even knew about her existence..
Chapter 7: I agree with you about what you said in the end.. School should be the neutral ground.. But then again there weren't many school scene either.. But this makes more sense.. And bcz I read the old version hence I don't have much respect for Junmyeon and Chanyeol.. Specially as alpha.. Thanks for making this clear that Yubin and Baekhyun knew each other from the start.. In old one we find out there real relation way later.. I am liking this much better..
Chapter 1: I loved the previous version but I am thrilled to read the re-vamped one as well. I thought my eyes are tricking me or something with update notifications on this story lol.. I am really glad that you decided to improve the story and re-draft it to your liking - and pleased that you are still on this platform, sharing your progress on your craft with us)) sending you all the support!
Chapter 1: I just noticed and read the announcement now :( I'll be busy in upcoming months even so, I'll be sure to keep up and read this amazing story again! I'm really looking forward to see how you've changed and added anything through the details you've mentioned since I've read it before this hehe. I hope everyone mew to this story will love it, your writings are always satisfying to read ^~^!<3
Chapter 7: honestly, i have zero respect for both Junmyeon and Chanyeol at the moment. more so for Junmyeon. I understand he lost someone really close to him, but if this is how he deals with loss, he truly never deserved to be the alpha. Still dislike Sehun for sending all the elders away, like where's the logic you idiot. Back to Chanyeol, he seems to have a good goal, but the way he's going about it is awful and also the way he's treating Baekhyun who used to be his friend. Honestly, once again Sehun, why did you think it would be a good idea to leave teenagers and children without any adult supervision. And it sounds like they're from a small town so like how do they not question it???
I'm glad Kyungsoo, Joohyun and Seungwan have more influence in the edited versions because they really deserve it, like they also lost their family and friends and yet they did their best to keep everything together. The pack just frustrates me, but it goes to show that just because generations of a certain family has held the role of Alpha, doesn't mean everyone will be able to handle the stress. Like Junmyeon just disappoints me, so much.......
Can't wait for the next chapter. Is it going to be Yeri's POV??????
Chapter 5: I really don't get Jin. It seems like he cares for his sister, but then it seems like he doesn't.
It was nice seeing the friendship between jungkook and yeri, you can tell they both care for each other and Yeri most definitely has a huge crush on him. I'm glad you added the last half just gives a much better look at the two.
I love all the tiny details you've added, like with the thunder run members keeping an eye out for the hunters and the additional details about who they're searching for. Because I don't remember a physical description in the original version.
Chapter 4: I understand why you took this decision though I must say previous one was already amazing.. BUT this revamped one is on another level.. And I am really loving this.. I love how you writing everything in detail.. Specially that new chapter.. Before we were not clearly knew why Baekhyun left Angel Hollow.. We only knew something happened and he left.. Also about the parents situation.. It was also just mentioned.. But I loved that you explain it in this revamped version.. And this new dream.. In old version we only knew Hyesun see some dreams or something like that and it was explained later what they were.. But we didn't knew what she used to see in the beginning.. So this is how Lamia met Sehun..but in old version I remember you said Lamia saw Sehun when he was working in a field? She killed his whole family but he didn't die.. Instead he turned.. But this looks like it's night time? Anyway I am looking forward to the future updates.. This looks so nostalgic.. Now who thought the guy Hyesun seeing in her dreams, one day he will be her best frenemy XD.. I also love how you added her moment with her dad..
Chapter 4: I actually really like the changes. It gives so much more depth to the story since as a reader of the original Immortals I can see how everything went down now with details (also I’m a er for addition of Junmyeon’s and Joohyun’s moments but that’s just my surene fan girl speaking through me ) Great great great job! I’ll be waiting for the next update. Can’t say I wanna know how this will turn out since- I know :)- but it’s amazing to go back to one of my fav fics <3
Chapter 4: so is yubin like playing innocent, because last chapter she was there for Sooyoung's funeral, like i know hyesun isn't aware of the otherworld yet, but i honestly did forget major details about her relationship with Yubin.
The party in the original was on Sooyoung's death anniversary wasn't it. And I don't think I remember The Seokjin bit, like i said i have really crappy memory, more like selective but okay.
While reading this chapter, all that went through my mind was, Hyesun really had a major character development from here to the sequel.
Hyesun's dream about the first meeting is another wonderful detail. Like I want to go into the details, but like i don't want to unintentionally spoil things for others.
I really can't wait for the next Hyesun and Baekhyun interaction.
Chapter 3: i was one of the new readers and was somewhere along chapter 20...but unfortunately when i clicked the next chapter it turned out that you were rewriting the story. i got so frustrated cause i was so intrigued by the plot and was constantly anticipating on how things would turn out. however, im excited about the new revisions and the improved writing that’ll show parts of the story that were initially briefed over before (even tho i didn’t get to read that far). i can already tell that the first two chapters have improved greatly compared to your previous writing (since it’s still fresh in my mind) so i’ll be waiting for more of your writing!! :D
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