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Title Grab :[10/10]

STILL No idea what it means. But it does make it sound mysterious. ^^



Foreword/Description: [8/10]

You made it short and simple.  Sweet =D xD
Good job my friend. =3


Storyline/Flow: [22/30]

The chapters are a bit too short, you should have spacing =3! Allows the reader to read more easily but other than that its okay. You story features yuri, I adore you for that... there arent ALOT of people on aff who like /yuri... so sad... I have a story similar to yours =3 but it you are welcome to check it out ^^



Characters: [26/30]

Good job on character portrayal ^^ Keep at it!!! I at writing and portaying characters D=

But still GOOD JOB =D BETTER THAN ME XD



Laughs/Bonuses/Extras: [20/20]

You have some laughs here and there and its good ^^

You got da art and everything <3 very creative i loves it =3 <3



Overall : [86/100] a  B GOOD JOB <3

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A/N: You seemed perplexed at the fic's title, I *think* because you overlooked the trailer (maybe you didn't scroll low enough down the page? Not sure what happened there lol). Or maybe the flashing letters passed too fast on the screen, I dunno!

Same with the title poster.

Hint:

Tantris/Onara <-------> Tristan/Aaron (it's an acronym, plain and simple :) )

I revised the text spacing as you suggested, and further realized I didn't like the way the chapters flowed in general. So the NEW Tantris Onara has fewer chapters though all the content remains. I'd hoped the new spacing might work better, but gahhh I guess you would prefer even MORE spacing huh? lol.