Home staffs advertisement form review form PACKAGES Advertisement and Review shop established july 2014   lin       LITTLEEDEEER• KAISOOEXOFOREVER •STORY REVIEw• PACKAGE 3        WINTER MEMORIES     TITLE:   loving your title, it really describe your story how it all started.   DESCRIPTION:   It's eye catching, it held some sad feeling on how their love story ended and how Chanyeol loved  Baekhyun all of his heart. It has the feel of "till death do us part"     PLOT:   As  expected your story plot is unique and you improve alot from the last time I read your story     CHARACTERIZATION:   The characters are still not well detailed and you need to emphasize what they looked like or what will be their role in the story.     FLOW:   hope you can put some flashbacks from their past specially when the Byun family where abroad.     WRITTING CONVENTIONS:   I can see  a improvement on your vocabulary and grammar (including in "The Sacrifice") but I have a little very little  problem, you use their name so often like Chanyeol ;there's Chanyeol's name in sentence one then on the other sentence; if ever you can use he instead Chanyeol but all in all good job.     ENJOYMENT:   To be honest I really love it hoe you an effort to make a story about Chanyeol's love story with D.O's mom and I'll subscribe it till the end, so fighting author-nim :))     NOTE:    I hope my reveiw will help you writting