☾ kissme_matoki
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Hanamiki's note:
Cute short story about love and friendship, but as I already said too rushed, which makes it less enjoyable. Nice work though!~
Hanamiki's note:
Cute short story about love and friendship, but as I already said too rushed, which makes it less enjoyable. Nice work though!~
First Impression;
Title: Has a cute feeling. :) 8/10;; Foreword: Tells a lot about the story, maybe a bit too much. 7/10;; Format: You shouldn't start a new line after every sentence. Try making paragraphs in order to get a structure. 6/10
In Depth;
Plot: Nice storyline, even if it's something common. Nice combination of love and friendship. 11/15;; Characterization: We don't get to know a lot about anyone besides the protagonist. You could have tried to get more feeling into it. 9/15
The Basics;
Grammar: Good grammar! No disturbing mistakes, good to read. 18/20;; Flow: It was a bit rushed. Even though it's a oneshot, you can use more space to make the readers get into the story/the protagonist. 5/10
All About Me;
Overall Enjoyment: 6/10
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