Chapter 2: Helloooo~ Saw you wanted comments so I thought I'd give my two cents. :3
Taemin is a . Oh the poor ontae feels. It's sad reading broken ontae because they are my number one otp. <33 Poor Jinki seems really beat up about it too. I think he really loves him. And five weeks?! wow taeminnie you're awful for not letting jinki know about that *glares at Minnie. At least jinki has his friends, and I'm alright with the taekey. Though I'm wondering if they're going to stay together because of what was said in the foreword. o.o It would be interesting to see into the head of Taemin and what he thinks of all of this.
I hope you don't mind if I gave some tips. I think they might help.
Start a new paragraph after each new person speaks or thinks something. It helps make everything look neater and flow smoother.
I'd also suggest trying to make the chapter a bit longer. Really take your time. If you want your readers to love the story then you have to love it yourself and be proud of the outcome.
And after you have typed out your chapter, always spell check it. There's a button that you can press when you're editing your chapter on here that can spell check for you. And if you don't know how a word is spelled google it. I do it all the time. Google is your friend. Google is a lifesaver XD
Anywayyy I hope I helped a bit. I'm sure if you did these tips then you would see more subscribers and comments. I wish you the best of luck! <333 First story can always be nerve-wracking. Like omg I personally hate my first two stories on here. lol but practice makes perfect. Don't give up!