chapter 2

LAST TO KNOW
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Next morning Onews p.o.v

this cant be happening, what did I do wrong why didn't he tell me I could have fixed whatever was happening

third person p.o.v

It was ten a.m and Onew was in his now empty apartment heartbroken and not knowing what to do he thought about calling his best friend Minho but he soon remembered that Minho would still be at work so he couldn't do that, he then remembered Lee Joon was at home so he soon called him but not before cleaning up the mess he made last night after everything that happened so he cleaned, cleaned like never before trying to forget all the pain in his heart when he heard his door bell ring.

Onew's p.o.v

"Who is it?" I yelled wiping my eyes one last time before I went to the door, I looked out the peep whole at the front door stood the person I thought I'd never see again, the person that was causing me all the pain I thought " It's him is he really coming back to me oh thank you my Minnie's coming home" but when I opened the door my heart was shattered again because it wasn't Minnie but his best twin friend Jongin I sighed "What do you want Jongin", he replied " Taemin sent me to get the rest of his things and I'm so sorry Onew he's made a terrible choice", after I heard him say his name more memories flooded through my mind and wit

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WickedDemonAngel #1
Chapter 2: Helloooo~ Saw you wanted comments so I thought I'd give my two cents. :3
Taemin is a . Oh the poor ontae feels. It's sad reading broken ontae because they are my number one otp. <33 Poor Jinki seems really beat up about it too. I think he really loves him. And five weeks?! wow taeminnie you're awful for not letting jinki know about that *glares at Minnie. At least jinki has his friends, and I'm alright with the taekey. Though I'm wondering if they're going to stay together because of what was said in the foreword. o.o It would be interesting to see into the head of Taemin and what he thinks of all of this.
I hope you don't mind if I gave some tips. I think they might help.
Start a new paragraph after each new person speaks or thinks something. It helps make everything look neater and flow smoother.
I'd also suggest trying to make the chapter a bit longer. Really take your time. If you want your readers to love the story then you have to love it yourself and be proud of the outcome.
And after you have typed out your chapter, always spell check it. There's a button that you can press when you're editing your chapter on here that can spell check for you. And if you don't know how a word is spelled google it. I do it all the time. Google is your friend. Google is a lifesaver XD
Anywayyy I hope I helped a bit. I'm sure if you did these tips then you would see more subscribers and comments. I wish you the best of luck! <333 First story can always be nerve-wracking. Like omg I personally hate my first two stories on here. lol but practice makes perfect. Don't give up!
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