Coffee, Books and My Thoughts {Review Shop} [Batch 1] {Finishing requests}

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welcome  to  the  Coffee,  Books  and  My  Thoughts

Writing does not simply mean writing words on a paper,

Writing means expressing your thoughts, creating your own world and releasing your imaginations.

 

 

 

Rule:

first: If you decide to request for a review, subscribe to this thread. Why? Because it will be easier for you to pick up your review and easier for me to make an announcement.

second: Please no bashing or posting hateful comment. You should know that it will not lead to anywhere and we should be nice to each other. Be nice.

third: Comment when you have received your review.

fourth: Do credit the reviewers and my shop in your foreword. Why? Because we spend our time for your stories. Time is gold. I really do not want to waste my time and I believe that all the staffs has the same thought too.

fifth: If you want to cancel your request. Please tell me within 24 hours. 

sixth:  I can review different genres but I am weak at sci-fi and yuri genre, I am not really into them but I will try. But the other reviewer-Jam can review every genre.

seventh: Be patient. 

eighth: No password. What is the point of this thing?

ninth: Requesting from the other shops is cool. Collecting different opinions is not a bad thing.

tenth:  We will not give you grade. The purpose I want to open this shop is reviewing your stories, not giving you grades.

 

 

Rubrics:

Tittle:

Is your title captivating? Does it relate to your story? Is it memorable? Does it reflect the mood of your story?

 

The first impression (description and foreword/ poster and background):

Is it interesting? Does it make me want to read more?

Does the poster fit your story? Does the background distract me?

Is the font is easy to read?

 

Plot: 

Is it interesting? Is it unique? Is it memorable?

 

Character:

Is the character realistic? Is what the characters do believable?

 

Writting style and Language:

Gen: I don't really focus on this part much. Why? Because English is not my language so if you need someone who is Grammar Nazi, I am not your choice, honestly. In this part, I will see if your writing made me confused or not, if you made some basic mistakes or not.

Jam: First off, I'm not exactly a Grammar Nazi however, I do get a bit picky about it, especially with simple grammar such as capital letters, commas etc. Other than that, I'm fine with a few mistakes, but if it's a common thing that occurs a lot then I do get strict. I'm more of a spelling police so beware

Danielle:  I am not much of a grammar nazi but I am quite particular about grammar. So, you make a mistake with grammar, your story might turn me off quite easily.

Queenie: English is like my 5th language so no, I am not exactly a Grammar Nazi. However, I do hate it when writers are using the present tense instead of the past one.

ViviChenny: Am I Grammar Nazi? I'm actually not that sure myself. The grammatical errors I point are usually general grammar. There are at times I highlight grammar that many people, even high school teachers, make the mistake, such as putting extra exclamation marks. I point it out for them to improve. 

 

Flow:

Is it too fast or too slow? Does everything flow smoothly? Do you have the transition or not?

 

My thoughts:

Do I enjoy your story? What is in my mind after I've read your story?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Foreword

 

 

 

I am ClairDeLune or you can call me Gen. 

What is my purpose for opening this shop? Honestly, I do not know. I guess, I just want to share my honest opinion to people who really want to hear my opinion. The word "reviewing" or "reviewer" makes me feel little bit uncomfortable because I am not a good writer, I am just someone who likes reading and sharing my thoughts. I will be honest with you about my opinions for your stories. Of course, you can argree or disargree with my opinions. 

 

 

 

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tiancai #1
Title: PIC - Partners In Crime
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/PIC/
Reviewer: Any.
Genre: Action, friendship, angst (?)
Anything else: Thanks in advance.
sapphireblue02 #2
Chapter 1: Story Title: Letters To You

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/510085/letters-to-you-donghae-eunhae-eunhyuk-romance-hyukhae

Reviewer: Any

Genre: Romance,

Anything else: Thank you very much :)
shizunebachi #3
Chapter 10: Story Title: The Guilty Vicarage

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/396556/the-guilty-vicarage-hongki-jaejin-jonghun-minhwan-mystery-seunghyun-jongjae

Reviewer: Any

Genre: Angst,

Anything else: Not really. Thanks in advance!
Amalya #4
Chapter 1: Story Title: From the Shadows

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/518171/from-the-shadows-action-angst-psychological-fourshot-lay-kris-kray

Reviewer: Any is fine (though you did an excellent job last time Jam!)

Genre: action (later) and angst with a touch of

Anything else: You guys did such an awesome job the last time I’d love to hear what you have to say about this one. Miracle of all miracles, it’s actually relatively short and complete. Haha Please feel free to take your time and I look forward to hearing your review.
darknesslovee #5
Chapter 9: HELLOOOOOOO \o.

First and foremost, I would like to thank Jam again for spending her time to review my not-so-wonderful story. Thank you so much for the nth time! As I said before this, I really can't wait to read the review since I'm too excited. Well anyway, I'm glad to know that you enjoyed the one-shot. For an amateur writer, I never expect that from any of my readers.

But the part that makes me feel delighted the most is the fact that you understand what I tried to interpret. I requested from some other shops, but they've complaint that they don't understand the part 'In spite of he is alone, he doesn't feel lonely at all, he has plenty of things to enjoy here, and someone to wait for'. They said that how I describe Jaejoong doesn't fit that line, but the thing is, they just don't understand that I'm trying to say that he is in denial state. Maybe they just not use to that kind of writing or so.

I will try my best to write another enjoyable stories in the future ^^ (and also credit you asap, of course).

(ヘ。ヘ)
Emuinthehouse #6
Chapter 10: Thanks for the review! It was quite helpful actually, to see my story from someone else's perspective.

I'm glad you liked Donghae, most people just go on with the whole "omg, I'm so sorry for Hyukjae" act and completedly forget about Donghae!

Anyways, thanks for reviewing my fic! I'll credit this shop in my foreword once I get onto my laptop! Thanks again!
Amalya #7
Chapter 8: introduced. I will definitely consider expanding the beginning at this point for at least a little more character development pre-Valkyr status. :)

Thank you for the comment on style as well. I have my hangups and hiccups with some points but I'm glad that it's coming off as at least a little advanced. That is sort of what I'm striving for.

I'm very excited that the flow is paced decently well. It's always a concern of mine and I certainly don't want to rush things but neither do I wish to have something drag on forever. So thank you for that.

In the end, even if it's not your preferred story, I'm glad it was at least mostly enjoyable and thank you again for the review. It has been helpful and I'll credit you and the shop asap. :3
Amalya #8
Chapter 8: First off, thank you very much for the review! I was definitely excited when I got the update that it was finished and posted. ^_^

I'll agree the title is a bit longer than my norm but it fit and I'm good with that. With your agreement of it suiting the story, it works for me. I also will agree that the description may be a teensy bit misleading with the 'love' bit but even though romance isn't the focal point of the story, their love is critical to how and why certain things unfold the way they do. I'm glad that the foreword was attention grabbing enough though. I definitely wanted something to catch the eye without being too tell-tale. In reference to blending the game and actual mythology, it's more of a notice so that if anyone's actually familiar with either, they hopefully won't try to take events at face value. I try to explain relevant Norse mythology bits in Author Notes in the subsequent chapters as well to help elaborate on points that I've either pulled straight from the mythos or used a little creative license with.

I'm glad the plot is coming together in an understandable manner, though I have felt a bit iffy with the lack of romance in the first few chapters, especially with my description the way it is. Like you suggested, I think adding a chapter before the prologue would sort of help with the initial development of Daehyun and Yongguk's relationship; at least maybe enough until they do come back together later in the story.

Fair point with the names. Because I'm pulling from the Norse pantheon, I wouldn't change those but I can see why strictly fantasy names paired with Korean names might be a bit confusing. They just tend to be my fallback and default setting when writing fantasy based pieces, especially as it's not taking place in Korea and is actually occurring in various cities across the continent. But again, I do see your point.

I have been told before the prologue was a bit rushed with the way that Daehyun was (cont.)
macchiato- #9
Chapter 1: Hi guys! So actually I've requested for my story to be reviewed, but when you already did, I've only posted the first chapter. I don't know if you are still accepting request nor that you will accept mine - but if you still are, can you probably review the second and third (final) chapters of my story :-)


Story tittle: Unthriving Vow
Story link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/479526
Reviewer: Since Jam had reviewed the first chapter, it'd be great if she can review the rests :-)
Genre: angst, romance
Anything else: I don't really expect this request to be accepted, though, lol but Jam's review really helped me so I thought it would be great if you can give me more of your thoughts :D
typical #10
Am I late? I hope not, I deleted my book and I would like to cancel it, sorry for the bother. ^^ I will come back though,
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