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jee-ho | definitions | coffeekyu 

t i t l e ; ( 5/5 )

I thought the title was creative and unique. 
Since you based each chapter off a definition, it suited the story well. 
I didn't find anything off about your title.
bravo, full marks for you. 

p r e s e n t a t i o n ; (6/10)

The fact that you didn't add a backround was good, since it won't distract the readers.
Although your poster was beautiful, it didn't really suit the story since it looks more angst. 
I suggest using the poster for how long the artist had told you to and then getting a new one. But if your story is going to more angst in the future, then you should add the tag; 'angst'.

p l o t & o r i g i n a l i t y ; (4/10)

I liked how you wrote the definitions of love, hate etc in the foreword but it doesn't really tell much about the story.
Just by writing definitions about a few words, espicially words like love and hate; it wouldn't catch the attention of a lot of readers. 
I mean, writing a few words about the story and getting people curious is good, but not if you don't write anything about the plot at all. 
As for the originality, I can't really say anything about that since you didn't really write a plot. However, so far i haven't seen anything new. It's the cliche 'girl and boy hate eachother at first, the smarter one is forced to help the other, they're going to gain feelings for eachother' type of story. 

g r a m m a r & s p e l l i n g ; (6.5/10)

Okay, your spelling was fine and you made mistakes here and there with your grammer. Remember to read your chapter before publishing it. I suggest reading every paragraph you finish and then write the next one. I noticed you put a comma before the word 'and' alot. For example: 

Incorrect: Bom just couldn't decide which one to pick, so she bought the corn, and the sausage role.

Correct: Bom just couldn't decide which one to pick, so she bought the corn and the sausage role. 

When there are only two subjects, you don't use commas. When there are more then two, you use commas.

'She bought a new hat, a new shirt and a pair of new shoes'.

'She bought a new hat and a new shirt'. 

c h a r a c t e r i z a t i o n ; (8/10)

From what I see, Bora seems to be the lazy type who lacks effort and Chanyeol seems like the average student with good looks and high intelligence. So far, you haven't ditched with what you stuck with at the beginning and Bora didn't become a giggling bundle of love as soon as she started talking to Chanyeol. I like how you also didn't put character descriptions, since a lot of people usually don't go with it. 

w r i t i n g  s t y l e ; (3/5)

Honestly, I personally don't prefer different POV's. I enjoy reading in third person or just the POV of one person. When reading what the character is thinking, for me at least, it takes away the excitement of trying to find out what the character's feelings or suspicions are. As for the way you write, I recommend putting spaces after lines or small descriptions/paragraphs. Usually when I read without the spaces, I read the same line twice. It also makes it easier for readers to find where they are up to in the chapter. For example; 

Resting my chin on the palm of my hand, I let out a sigh. 'I'm so bored.. hopefully something new will happen today', I thought to myself.

The classroom was hot and stuffy, my uniform stuck uncomfortably against my sweaty skin. The fan attached to the ceiling was rotating lazily, not even producing the slightest bit of cold wind.

"Ah, Miss Song!.. Better late then never", said the sarcastic Mr Kim, he's our math's teacher.

"Mm.. Sorry sir.." I heard Bora mutter while bowing her head slightly before making her to her seat.

( But you didn't do this in chapter three, so that was fine except you put in the spaces to often. ) 

s t o r y  f l o w ; (3.5/5)

The pace of the story was okay, you didn't rush it while you were writing and made it descriptive and described the surroundings etc. But what I thought was, didn't they start the tutoring way to quickly? After Bora gets lectured, the teacher suddenly assigns him to tutor Bora without even getting permission from either parents. So after they have a little talk, they go straight to Bora's house and start the tutoring. They should of planned it for the next day or another day instead of getting straight to it. By the way, Yeol's daydreaming couldn't of lasted for the whole walk to Bora's house, unless she lived inside the school. 

o v e r a l l  e n j o y m e n t ; (14/20)

coffeekyu;

heyheyhey. 

sorry if i sounded harsh, by the way this is purely based in my opinion. 

I'm not to much of an OC fan, unless i liked the storyline or i'm a fan of the author. 

Honestly, it's not my type of story, but i did the best i could do for your review. :)

thank you for requesting and goodluck with your story, come back again if you would like another review. 

ciao.