Great plot :) Although you said your english wasn't very good, I thought it was fine, but you just need to tune things up a bit :D I loved the ending, because it was so dream like and happy, but the lead up to it was a bit too quick, kind of like you rushed it. Other than that, I loved it! Can't wait to read your other works.!
ATTENTION EVERYONE I'M THE ONEW'S WIFE SHE IS TALKING ABOUT. /slapped<br />
d'aaawww you did a good job on your first fic, ai! I really love the way you describe everything from the beginning to the end. and of course, the ending is brilliant <3<br />
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thanks for sharing this ai~ you did good on your debut, dont worry ;)
Aaaaw, thank you very much *bow. It just a one shot actually. so its finished now :D I'm waiting for your comment about my story :D . once again. thank you. :D
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