Ramen with Vegetables Please and Could You Add a Bit of Love Without the Skin?

Description

"Before he continued to eat, Jinki non-chantingly slipped a ring on his boyfriend’s finger and kissed his hand.

Kibum was stupefied for a few seconds, breath caught. His heart wobbled, stumbled, and rolled off a cliff."

Foreword

Pairing: Jinki/Kibum (OnKey)
Ratings: PG
Genre: Drama/Romance

 

This story was inspired by SHINee's song Last Gift.

This story is a oneshot, and will be written in poem/prose poem format. I always write in poem, heh.

This fanfic will have two poems in it, I. and II. I think reading them both at once works best,

but its up to you how you read it =). I hope it won't be confusing!

 

Sorry for any spelling mistakes I might have not catched. Enjoy reading and leave a comment!

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kiwiandacai #1
This is beautiful; it's gorgeous. The way it reads, the way it flows... It has this certain rhythm to it, this fluidity that simply adds on to the muted (but definitely not insignificant) feelings within the story (a result of the narrative techniques used :D). And it builds up the situation too. It builds up, slowly, heading upwards on a gentle slope before it reaches the peak, the uncovering of all those insecurities, missed opportunities and unfortunate decisions. It builds up, it builds up. If only I can draw a graph now... I guess it would look something similar to a t-distribution?

I wonder if I'm coming across properly.

I think I am rambling already.

Oops.

Anyway, it's a great piece of art and to sum it all up: I love it <3

Sorry for being late to the party and commenting years after this has been published. I hope this comment will still make it to you though ^^
DinoNumber4 #2
It took me forever to read this<br />
but I regret nothing<br />
It was amazingly beautiful in multiple ways<br />
You have an amazing way with words author-sshi<br />
And it's OnKey<br />
gotta love OnKey<br />
Hazardous #3
Touching and beautiful. ;)
whatisyixing #4
whoah, this is really beautiful :')
colourful_clouds #5
My dear, that was beautiful. To tell a story about hurt and healing-and in poem form too-was amazing. Please continue to write.
ryu_013 #6
waaaaa...<br />
so touching....<br />
now im crying....<br />
hihihihi!!!
Mairee #7
wow. that was amazing! DAEBAK ! <br />
<3 it!
lolisho #8
wow~ amazing! I really enjoyed reading this fic. <br />
the way you write is so nice, I was really into reading it. :D <br />
gah, I'm happy~!<33
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