A Lonely Road

Description

 

"They say that before you die your whole life flashes before your eyes but for me it was empty, quiet...a lonely road."" 

 

Naeun, story told from her perspective. 

Chansung, love interest. 

 

Foreword

So this is my first attempt at writing a oneshot and a story in this genre, I'm still not sure how I feel about this story...it was probably a fail, I might even edit it, not sure yet.

This is also the first time I participate in a writing contest, entry to the Never Stop Dreaming Writing Contest. My prompts used for this story were 1, 27 & 38

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uncontrolablefreak #1
this is so good. seriously. you're the best, author-nim!!! <3 <3
namzUd #2
Chapter 1: I liked how you managed to portray Naeun's innocence so convincingly that by the time the fic ends, I feel really disturbed like @hopelesswriter. The way you also portrayed her indecisiveness at letting him get to her/control her got to me and it was thoughtprovoking. liked how you ended it in such an open ended and ominous way that it makes the reader wonder. Also makes me wonder abt chansung's intentions. I also like your writing style despite the few errors:)Well done^^
popgirl345543 #3
:) I was checking out my competition for the contest and I would have to say, you're good. XP I had to reread this a few times to get the whole idea. I didn't get the last part until like just now. Haha I thought he had emotionaly kiled her, or something like that. But now- it sounds more literal than just that.
Anyways ^^ good job XD I used prompt 27 as well :) hehe good luck to us :D
hopelesswriter #4
Chapter 1: This is so......terribly disturbing...and disturbingly awesome.
i don't feel good after reading this, but i feel really good about feeling this much bothered.
Naeun gives off a very normal naive innocent vibe of young girls, well ok not all young girls are naive but there are many who are, probly...idk.
Chansung is a total creep. makes me wonder if he's a lil psychotic and the jealousy provoked his crazy OR he really had targeted her as victim from the beginning n that he's just a bad guy she doesn't know, i'm leaning towards the latter but i don't know.
sorry, tend to get lost in imagination...><
Thanks for sharing the great piece and good luck for the contest~!
YeoJaGaSu #5
Chapter 1: Wow. Like I know it's not good for other competitors to say this, but it is awesome! Just wow, crazy wow. Speechless man, speechless.
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