Hello I am a American girl from England. 
Hello I am Suzy I am an half korean/american girl and I already have my own harem. 

Reason: The first one is a clear example of something that doesn't make sense. The second one also doesn't make sense, because Korean people do not exactly hate forgein people. BUT they definatly don't accept them so easily. Before you write something you should do your research. C:

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Hello I'm Suzy. I am a part of the girl group Miss A. I love singing and dancing. You might know me from the drama Dream High. Yes, Dream High the first season. 
You don't remember me? How come!? Guys from 2PM starred with me! I thought that you would have seen it, because they starred in it. 

Reason: Isn't it obvious? It is to small and it hurts my eyes. 

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Hello I'm Suzy. I am a part of the girl group Miss A. I love singing and dancing. You might know me from the drama Dream High. Yes, Dream High the first season. 
You don't remember me? How come!? Guys from 2PM starred with me! I thought that you would have seen it, because they starred in it. 

Reason: This font is going over the top. 

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Hello I'm Suzy. I am a part of the girl group Miss A. I love singing and dancing. You might know me from the drama Dream High. Yes, Dream High the first season. You don't remember me? How come!? Guys from 2PM starred with me! I thought that you would have seen it, because they starred in it. 

Reason: To many diffrent colours. It is not good for my eyes.

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Hello I'm Suzy. I am a part of the girl group Miss A. I love singing and dancing. You might know me from the drama Dream High. Yes, Dream High the first season. You don't remember me? How come!? Guys from 2PM starred with me! I thought that you would have seen it, because they starred in it. 

Reason: Can you read this? You can't right? Stick to black and blue!

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HUH?! I am married to a KINGKA?!

Reason: Please, don't write things in capital letter if you want to make your point. If you do it in a tittle it's fine. But you shouldn't do it in your story.

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Hello I'm Suzy. 

I am a part of the girl group Miss A. 

I love singing and dancing. You might know me from the drama Dream High. 

Yes, Dream High the first season. 

You don't remember me? How come!?

Guys from 2PM starred with me! 

I thought that you would have seen it, because they starred in it. 

Reason: I think this speaks for itself.