#2 Loving a Bad Boy - zeydiinara (Reviewer: BangingYongguk)
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Title (2/5)
The title sounds really boring and cliché. It would not appeal to me.
Appearance (5/5)
The poster looks really good. Background is recommended but I think it looks better without a background.
Description and Foreword (2/10)
After I read the description, I knew the entire plot already. At the end, Dara and Jiyong(GD) lives happily ever after. What a great oneshot. The foreword only has the poster credits. So, yeah...
Plot/Flow (20/20)
The flow was really good. I understood what was happening. I wanted to cut points off b/c of the plot but since it's a oneshot, I'll let you off.
Originality (0/10)
Nothing surprising. I've seen many oneshots like this. You could of added more to it. Maybe even a twist.
Arrangement (5/5)
No comment.
Writing Style/ Neatness (5/5)
No comment.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation(20/30)
1) “What took you so long?” he asked.
"What took you so long?" He asked.
2) He continued then, “…then we’re done.”
He continued then, "Then we're done."
3) “So… you really like me?” he said after a while.
"So... You really like me?" He said after a while.
4) “Even so, I can’t do it,” I said as I slapped his hand away and rubbed my painful cheek.
"Even so, I can't do it!" I said as I slapped her hand away and rubbed my painful cheek.
5) I know he had a bad personality like everyone said so, but I firmly believe that he’s not that bad or that some kind of a story I have yet to know behind his personality.
I knew he had a bad personality but I firmly believe that he isn't that bad.(The sentence is way to long and contains information the reader already knows. Therefore, I erased parts of it.)
R/N: There is similar mistakes in which I haven't pointed out. Please re-read the oneshot and fix them.
Enjoyment (10/10)
I enjoyed the oneshot despite the fact that I knew what was going to happen. Your writing style is very unique. Please, keep up the good work. P.S. Sorry for giving you such a low grade.
Total= 69/100
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