Aish! That Jung Daehyun! by kpoplistener

Title (2/5)

The title if kind of iffy. I wouldn't click on stories like this, though. Just from the title, I can tell that the main character will think of Daehyun as someone who's annoying and will probably be those cliché types of stories out there.

Appearance (5/5)

Love the appearance! It matches with the mood of your story and appeals to the reader's eyes.

Description/Foreword (7/15)

If those who don't like cliché stories clicked on your story and read your description, there will be a good chance that they'll click out and ignore it. Your description has a good summary of your story, but it really gives off a cliché plot.

I always advise people to stay away from character descriptions, and you did a good job of that. However, by spoiling who the characters (and minor characters) are, the readers are expecting those characters to make an often appearance (less often for the minor characters, though). Your foreword doesn't grab my attention except for the nice character chart. It should have either a prologue or some kind of quote. There are many other uses for the foreword that can strengthen attract more readers rather than just a character chart.

Plot (5/25)

In the world of AFF, this type of story will be categorized as very cliché. You can find a story about the main girl character living with a boy group and eventually changing throughout the story in almost every comedy fanfic. This idea is very popular and quite overused. With the overused plot, the characters also become cliché, which I will further explain in the characters section.

Characters (5/15)

All the characters, especially the main OC, are equally cliché. Kim Namjoo plays the "Ice Princess" who eventually opens her heart to the fellow boys around her. Jung Daehyun becomes the guy who hates the new girl, but eventually falls in love with her just because she's "different." The rest of the B.A.P members are all supportive of Namjoo and Daehyun. These characteristics are seen in many fanfics around AFF, and it will bore some readers, like me, who continue to read the story.

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