Chapter 2: its good.. hehe.. hahaha.. kiki so sensitive.. keep crying no matter happen or no matter the others comfort him.. seobbie.. so stubborn.. hahahhaha.. even his lover told him to undergo the surgery,he still refuse.. but,for kiki,he did.. hyunseung.. keep nagging.. I tgought the one that always nagging is junhyung.. hahahahahha.. btw.. awesome.. hehehehhe
Hiiee!! Ypur plot was really really good. I love the story and its very sad. However your paragraphing and dialogues are messy. If the language was better, it could have been more sad to read. Overall good job! ^^¥~
Remember, be neat, improve language. Those points help reader enjoy what they read. Continue writing, hwaiting!^^¥~
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