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Never mind that she might come off as a Plain Jane to some when they read this, at least she isn't losing her temper or going hyper or alternating between them in the same every five minutes O.o I like how she teased Taemin in the end about supposedly finding someone else when she was talking about him all along XD [Taemin's subsequent reaction was so cute, wahaha!]

This story gives off a manga-like vibe. From the moment it began until it reached the end, the scenes and movement of time was reminiscient to the techniques used in shoujo manga one-shots. Heck, the part where it was revealed how Taemin knew of Saki reminded me of those es in shoujo mangas with the same plot device ^^;; I'm just wondering how far the gap was between writing this and ODS, since you said this one-shot was written in 2010 and you posted the latter here on AFF in the same year. Your writing style for this one-shot shares a few similarities on how you wrote your earlier chapters in ODS, but over time, you've been slowly but steadily improving in the later chapters and post-2010 one-shots ^^ You've really come a long way from how you wrote back then to how you write at present, and I believe that you will continue to improve no matter how much of a struggle it is =3

The only issue I'm going to raise is the fleshing out of the main characters; I think they were slightly underdeveloped. Taemin's character could've been explored more, and even if Saki was fine as she was, it would've been better if we got to know her a little more [e.g. why she studied fashion, why she chose to study in France, does she really not have any recollection of meeting Taemin in the past? etc.] ^^;; But all in all, this was a light and easy read, something you can turn to during those long, rainy nights when you want something sweet to read ^^ Continue writing, and keep up the good work~!

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Hi~~~! ^o^ As promised, I am here~! So... umm... hi~~~! XD;;

I admit, my knowledge of Aibu Saki begins and ends with Zettai Kareshi, so I wouldn't be able tell if there's anything off about the way you portrayed her ^^;; So my solution was to imagine her as an entirely new character, which worked fairly well ^^ And that makes the two of us when it comes to French since I know nothing about the language so I can't tell if you might have used something incorrectly. But those are just minor details [for me, at least] because there are other things more important to discuss~

Did Taemin's Juliette look inspire you to write this? I can just imagine him with his curly red hair, his innocent expression, and how much he must be enjoying his bread X3 At first I thought he was some random creeper who, y'know, randomly came across Saki a few times and got curious about her, so he asks around about her and finally shows himself to her one day--with a dress over his jeans, no less XD;; I couldn't figure out who Taemin was at first, but when the fashion designer was mentioned + remembering his background, it began to click in my mind. I had my suspicions of how he was actually related to Saki, and I was partially right XD And oh my gosh, Taemin after those years of staying in Seoul and returning to find Saki, like what he said before leaving: can you imagine the current Taemin in the clothes you described him in appearing before a very surprised Saki? *O*

Saki, Saki... How could you forget about Taemin! XD [Oh well, it's not like we remember all the people we meet in our life anyway ^^;;] I have zero knowledge about the real person, but that didn't bother me much because I found her to be quite "normal" in this story; like, in the sense that she's your normal girl with big dreams and armed with a--surprise, surprise--a normal temper.

This is Cute..gosh i really wish i can speak french!