whatever that awaits us

oh to be in love
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It was finally Saturday, also known as the day Seulgi and Joohyun go on their first ever date. They had kept in touch via text messages and shared anecdotes relating to their work and daily life. They shared information on their respective family backgrounds. How Seulgi was from Ansan and belonged to a family with one older brother and how she moved out to live a little more freely. Her interests and work, as well as her hobbies which included singing and dancing. Joohyun shared excitedly that she also liked to dance and was more than able to get over 90 points at the karaoke on any trot song with no problem. She also disclosed that her sibling was younger than her by a few years. 

 

Seulgi also came to know about the unfortunate reason she had to resort to working at a café. A few months ago, the company Joohyun worked at underwent a restructuring process and her position as a marketing assistant was one which was deemed redundant. Although the situation was unfortunate, she could not find it in herself to be mad at the company. They had treated her well during the 3 years she worked at the company and the only reason that she was let go was due to the fact there were two other employees in the same position who were senior to her. They also made sure to give her a decent severance package as well.

 

Due to those events, and the fact that her younger sister was heavily pregnant, she ended up moving in to help her around the house. However, there were only so many things to do everyday so her sister pushed her to get a part-time job which is why she ended up working as a waitress. Joohyun was not someone who measured status by the kind of work someone did, and thus, though she had a college degree and only worked office jobs previously, she did not hesitate to take on the job and learn something new. It even ended up making her even more empathetic towards those who have to work in the service industry.

 

Hearing all this, Seulgi couldn't help but admire Joohyun even more. It's not every day you come across someone so mature and smart and with such admirable beliefs as well. Most people were too cocky for their own good, as far as Seulgi had experienced. It was nice to come across someone who was genuinely that selfless. 

All those musings aside, Seulgi was all glamed up and ready for her date. By that, it meant that she had ditched her usual plaid shirts and jeans and opted to wear a black turtleneck sweater, a nice thick blazer to keep her warm and tight black pants. She put her hair in a clean bun and wore some minimal makeup as well. She didn't want to appear too laid back but also didn't want to go overboard with her appearance. The plan was for Seulgi to pick Joohyun up from her residence and for them to go out for dinner and then maybe walk around whatever neighborhood they wer

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Apologies for ending the chapter a little abruptly. Felt it was getting a little long and I wanted to post an update to let you all know I'm not dead lol

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Odd_20 #1
Chapter 4: Hello there. I have stumbled upon your fic by chance and wanted to give it a try. Here are my thoughts as a reader and writer, who would like to see you do better after noticing those numbers. There must be a few reasons behind such a situation.

First of all, your plot is cliché. It's obvious. There is nothing wrong with recycled or overused ideas, many authors do these often, but it's all about offering the reader a new window, an interesting view. With each sentence I read, I could already picture your next move. I could guess all of the dialog. These chapters felt like any other sappy Korean dramas or wattpad teenager fanfictions.

Then, your writing is bland. The words feel empty. I would suggest showing more emotion, more movement, more expression that varies. Readers expect to see, feel, hear all those people. But in these chapters, they just come and go without making me care about them. Give them more character and see how it turns out.

To acquire more attention, I would also suggest longer and organized chapters, another area you are lacking in. They make the reading experience complete and more concrete. Don't worry about not meeting the deadline, worry about meeting the expectations. The audience will even wait for a whole year for you, if your work is good of course. You personally have to work on this particular step, as far as I can see.

Also, you wrote that there is no particular plan in your mind for this story. This is a very wrong move. Most successful authors offer complex plots with more than one layer, unlike yours, and they do this by planning everything. Like I said above, having a solid story is important not only for the reading experience, but for your own satisfaction. Are you truly satisfied with this? Ask it to yourself at every step. If not, back away and think harder.

In my opinion, you need to work very hard on your writing in general. You have a long way to go. This story was your start, let it be the one you realize your mistakes and better your work. If you don't, you will keep beating yourself up, be disappointed in yourself for the effort you had to put in. Oh, make sure to read other authors as well and see how they do things. Even the stories you dislike might have done better than yours. Don't judge, instead, always be open to learning.

Please don't take these so seriously. I just want you to see and understand some things. I hope this comment was useful.
lalaland111
#2
Chapter 4: This was a very cute chapter. I like that Seulgi wanted to make new memories with her date (Joohyun), - that shows that she's interested in going out of her comfort zone (although, at the same time, it could also be that she's afraid of creating new memories in places that she frequents... is she afraid that the date is going to fail? or am I reading too much into it?)

Joohyun is just too cute, as well! D'aww.
grotexque
#3
Chapter 2: Well-written! Seulgi is smooth here and cackled seeing Irene's fabric softener making a comeback. Hope to see more of Joohyun and Seulgi's story, authornim!

[sings] it's the start of something new~