My twins nutcrackers

Description

You (Choi Na Mi) is an orphan. No father, no mother, no siblings. You live alone, study at school, and work to stay alive. All the school hate you, but none of them dare to bully you, because of something you don't even know.

One day, you get a surprise and your life change.

Character description:

- Choi Na Mi (you)

* Rude

* Anti-social

* Actually, she acts rude because she is lonely

* Hair color: brown

 

-Jo Kwangmin

* Sweet face but has a bad attitude

* Jerkass

* Can't wink

* Afraid of fireworks

* Hair color: black

 

-Jo Youngmin

* Sweet face, good attitude. Perfecto.

* Afraid of fireworks

* Hair color: blonde

 

-So Eun Hee

* Na Mi's only friend, work at the same place as her

* Sweet girl with sweet attitude

Foreword

-Christmas Eve-

 

Na Mi's POV

Ahh, work in Christmas Eve... .

I walk through the heavy snow to my house. Cover myself with my ripped coat. Well, I don't have enough money to buy a new coat. I realize that the snow is falling heavier. I walk, shivering. Suddenly-

*BUMP*

I bump into an old grandma.

"Sorry- I'm so sorry young girl..." the grandma stands and just walk away. Just that? Just sorry? I stand and look around, finding for her. But she's gone. Too fast for an old grandma. Suddenly I see something on the ground. A box. Maybe the grandma drops it. I take it and look inside. But the snow blocks my sighting. Ahh, I'll just examine it at home. I run quickly to my house.

 

-At house-

I make myself a cup of hot chocolate and opens the box. 2 nutcrackers. One in blue uniform, the other in red uniform. One is blonde, and the other is brown-head. Well, I don't need nutcrackers. I'll just give it to Eun Hee tomorrow.

I put the nutcrackers on the table beside my bed and sleep.

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luhans
#1
Aww.. It was a cliffhanger ending. but it was really good. :) nice job author.

so what happened to YoungMin and to everyone?
iAppy13 #2
Ermm actually I'm still on chapter 2 and I've realize that YoungMin saying "hyung" to KwangMin which is wired because YoungMin is older... By 6 mins. ^^,
Rini6189
#3
You're welcome!

Knowing that Nami would choose Kwangmin over him, Taemin must've thought that there's no hope for him since she's the reason why he decided to cease gang activities. So, returning to his old lifestyle is the path he decided to choose in order to move on by keeping himself busy. Kwangmin really has good timing to show up at the scene like that. He truly loves Nami to be willing to put his life on the line for her. It's good that he'd followed her when he did to keep an eye on her knowing the danger she's putting herself into. At least she and Taemin get to remain friends in the end. That's better than having no connection with her at all. Giving it some thought has helped her to come to terms with her true feelings. What's important is that she's happy with her choice at the end: Kwangmin.

If Mina and Youngmin were to get romantically involved in the future, they'd make a cute couple. From the way that it ended up between them, they're hitting it off as good friends. It's nice to see that Mina is getting along well with him by putting the grudge they had towards each other after their encounter on the streets behind them. At this point, Youngmin seems to have already let got of Nami for Kwangmin to be happy with her. He's one caring, understanding, loving brother.

Gangster refers to a person who gets involved in dangerous activities that are a part of their lifestyle on the streets. Since you're referring to a group of people, "gang" is the proper term to use.

I ever kissed these 2 guys.
Correction: even

The ending is okay. If you'd thought of something more that you could add to expand on it, it could turn out better with some details to give the readers a good impression at the end. It doesn't seem dramatically romantic if that's what you were trying to portray. There seems to be more dialogue than details. Reading novels can give you ideas on pulling off great endings.
dara-ish
#4
nice ending ^^
poor taemin but I think he will get another girl :)
SeoKyung #5
End ? Poor taemin
kellen_1825 #6
Wahhhhhhh this is acute ending.. but. but how about my youngmin I thought she likes Na mi too. Aigooo to many question teehee great job ^^
NewBeginnings
#7
XD I'm not smart :P
I like your ending.. Poor taemin oppa.. But I'll choose Kwangkwang oppa too xD
<3
I'm gonna miss this story>_<
pipoomica
#8
dammit, she didnt choose kwangmin
but as long as she's happy thats good
CaramelBee
#9
@KwangWooYoung79BF : You guess it right! You're smart XD
@woomin4ever : yeash XD
@Rini6189 : ah ya CPR! I totally forgot XD Thanks!

thanks to all my loyal readers that read this story from the beginning to the end, thanks for supporting me even if I update rarely! thanks too for supporting me by saying good luck in my exams! I love you all! hope we can meet again in another story of mine! Thanks! ^^
Rini6189
#10
Taemin must be reeling from the aftereffects of being accidentaly knocked out by Kwangmin to be feeling hostile towards him. It seemed that they were fighting over Nami like two stags in competition to win a doe as his mate. At least they resolved it in the hospital with Nami in the room. xD Youngmin's still continuing with the game of making Kwangmin jealous to prove that his brother has feelings for Nami. That's obviously a secret message meant for Taemin to unscramble. "Tiger" must be his gangster name. Things must not be going well out on the streets for them to want Taemin to return to his former lifestyle.

Ch. 22 mistake:

Taemin widens his eyes then Kwangmin elbows him, making he smile and nods furiously.
Correction: Taemin widens his eyes, then Kwangmin elbows him, which makes him smile and nod furiously.

Without his knowing, I copy that letters to my notebook.
Correction: Without him knowing, I copy those letters into my notebook.

I've thought of actually checking out "Salamander Guru" some time. The only whole episode that I'd watched is the one with Taemin and Key as cameos. Because of school, I didn't have much time for that. Taemin does look convincing in drag. Despite the drama, there is some good humor in it. It is SHINee Minho's first major acting project in a drama. Acting is one of his passions. It'd be great to see him at work doing what he loves.