Chapter 2: Ah... This was painful to read. Interesting though... So one's in a relationship but still has feelings for the other, while the other is really just so confident that she can get the former back. I like this line: 'You are in the past, now's the present.' and how it links to the line in italics. Another great read here.
Chapter 1: A short, yet impactful story. I like how through only dialogue, I can tell what the characters are feeling - the frustrations, the resignation. I also like how you ended this story with that line in italics and how it linked back to the part where one of them wasn't able to know what's in the mind of the other. This line is really deep: '"There's no such things as you or me. In a relationship there's only us."'
Just a few things to point out:
1. It should be 'didn't care' and not 'didn't cared'.
2. Sentences should end with punctuation and start with capital letter.
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