One

"You're going back there? To him? That jerk?"

"I thought you didn't care"

"You know I always do"

"Then why? Why did you let me go?"

"... it's for you"

"There's no such things as you or me. In a relationship there's only us."

"There won't be us. You know it's impossible"

"Miracles happens! Don't you know? If we both put in just a little bit of effort... you're just a loser."

"I have my stands"

"Then go on! Leave me alone!"

"I guess you won't ever know what I'm trying to protect"

"How can I if you don't say? Can I read minds? No!"

"..."

"I'm so sick of this already."

"Just as what I thought. When I let you go I've been prepared."

"You're really a loser."

"Goodbye-"

All I'm trying to protect is only you.

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cjmoo_ #1 Aug 3, 2018 15:39:55

Chapter 2: Ah... This was painful to read. Interesting though... So one's in a relationship but still has feelings for the other, while the other is really just so confident that she can get the former back. I like this line: 'You are in the past, now's the present.' and how it links to the line in italics. Another great read here.

cjmoo_ #2 Jun 28, 2018 11:15:23

Chapter 1: A short, yet impactful story. I like how through only dialogue, I can tell what the characters are feeling - the frustrations, the resignation. I also like how you ended this story with that line in italics and how it linked back to the part where one of them wasn't able to know what's in the mind of the other. This line is really deep: '"There's no such things as you or me. In a relationship there's only us."'

Just a few things to point out:
1. It should be 'didn't care' and not 'didn't cared'.
2. Sentences should end with punctuation and start with capital letter.

Looking forward to the next chapter! :)