Hide and Seek

What Happened to the Girls ?

- Many Years Ago -

'' Girls ! Where the heck are you !? '' Taeyeon shouted . 

The girls were playing Hide and Seek in the park and unluckily , Taeyeon , the worst at playing Hide and Seek , was the catcher . The park that they were playing in was special to them as it was their playground . 

Tiffany was hiding in a bush , Jessica was hiding at the Pavillion , Sunny and Sooyoung were hiding up in a tree , Yuri and Hyoyeon was moving around while Seohyun and Yoona was stilll finding a place to hide .

'' Psst ! Sunny , I think that Taeyeon would find us first since the tree has HARDLY ANY LEAVES ! Oh yeah and YOU WERE THE ONE WHO CHOOSE IT . ''  Sooyoung half shouted half whispered . '' It is not my fault that YOU wanted to hide IN A TREE ! '' Sunny shouted . '' Never mind , lets just keep quiet and not attract any attention . '' Sooyoung softly replied . Sunny thought ' Why did I follow her ? ' .

Taeyeon , who gave up went to buy ice cream from an Ice Cream Parlour nearby bumped into a boy with brown , short hair . Taeyeon shouted , '' Hey ! Watch where your going  ! '' . 

'' I'm s..s..sorry . I didn't mean it . '' the boy said . Taeyeon looked into his eye and suddenly , she felt cheerful and energetic  . '' Oh ! It's okay , I'm Taeyeon by the way . What is your name ? '' she said . '' I'm Park Jungsoo but please call me Leetuek because I think I am special , '' Leeteuk replied . '' I am playing tag with my group of friends , want to join us ? '' Taeyeon said , '' I would love to but I am playing Hide and Seek with my friends . ''  It's okay then , want to meet later when all of us finish our games ? '' Leetuek said cheerfully . '' Sure ! Where do you want to meet ? '' Taeyeon said . '' Let's meet at the Big Apple Tree at the corner of the park . '' Taeyeon said . '' Okay , see you there ! '' , and she went back to find the girls . Leetuek thought , '' Wow ! She is so cute and pretty ! '' . 

The rest of the girls who were hiding thought , '' Gosh ! I have been hiding for almost an hour and Tae still haven't found me ? 

'' Okay , maybe I should look at the Pavillion , since there is where me and Sica usually hides . '' Taeyeon thought .  She tip-toed to the Pavillion and saw Jessica sleeping . '' Ke ke ke , guess I should scare the Ice Princess . '' Taeyeon said to herself . Luckily she had a cucumber in her pocket . She sneaked behind Jessica and placed the cucumber in front of her face . '' Sica !!!!! '' Taeyeon shouted . Jessica opened her eyes and saw a huge cucumber . '' OMG ! Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh ! '' Jessica shouted . Then , she looked up and saw Taeyeon . '' Seriously Tae ? '' Jessica said . '' Hahaha , okay get over it . Help me find the others . '' Taeyeon replied . Jessica nodded and got up . 

- End of Chapter - 

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OK , finally finished the first chapter . So what do you think of it ? I''ll try to update when I'm free . By the way , do you want all the Super Generation couples or just some ( Taeteuk , SunSun , SiFany , HaeSica , HyoHyuk ) ? I prefer the second choice .

- snsdtaeteuk

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BlueCupcake
#1
Chapter 5: Noooo! Please don't go on hiatus too long! I want to read more!!
exotaeng9 #2
Chapter 5: Update soon
YooniqueDJ
#3
Yeah snsdtaeteuk ! :)
What is your name btw ? What shall I call you ?

I'll be fixing the chapter / idea request you are requesting for at the moment; sorry, so sorry for the delay ! My school and life is so jam-packed of busy-ness >.<

The chapter (I think it should be called a chapter because I'm better at giving a start of chapters than ideas xD) is written by lychee68 & me so yeah :)

Also, just like what lychee said, everyone makes mistakes now and then, and there is always room for improvement ! :)

Hopefully I can help you edit or fix up some future chapters :)

And hopefully I'll be a good co-author !

I'm excited yet a bit anxious ^_^
lychee68
#4
Ahh I see now! ^_^
That's okay everyone makes mistakes and everyone improves so don't feel bad! :)
Take it as a positive thing and hopefully I'll be able to finish your idea request with MidnightSapphire soon!! :D
snsdtaeteuk
#5
@lychee68 Well , actually , said is like the only thing my teacher taught me to write .... so I'll take note of your advice and improve myself ! It is also okay to be strict although it sometimes make me feel like a bad author ......
lychee68
#6
Also, try using some other words rather than just using "said" all the time~

For example:
"Look at my new Keroro cap Kyuhyun oppa!" Seohyun waved the cap around excitedly.
Kyuhyun beamed at the other. "It's cute!"

This will make your writing richer and more interesting for readers :)

(Sorry I'm not supposed to be reviewing ^_^" Hope you don't mind!)
lychee68
#7
Annyeong!
I'm doing your idea request with MidnightSapphire (Because she's quite busy at the moment)! Is that okay? :)
Just finished reading the chapters~ ^_^
Although we're helping with the next chapter, I think you should write chapters in more detail.
Also, put each speaker on a new line- that way the reader will understand the story more clearly.

Haha sorry for saying all that- I just wanted to give some constructive criticism! Hope you don't mind! :)
YooniqueDJ
#8
Go check your inbox snsdtaeteuk ! :)
I sent you a few messages :)
YooniqueDJ
#9
Chapter four is amazingly short =))
One paragraph ! Anyways, I also have a few questions about your request ~
I'll inbox you.
Heheheh :)
YooniqueDJ
#10
Chapter 3: [Btw the comment below was for chapter 2] Yeah your chapters are very short >.< LOL ! And once again new speaker = new line ^^
Remember that snsdtaeteuk ~
Hehe sorry about my comments, just like to help you improve ^^ My reviewer side [I'm not a reviewer though] is getting the best of me at the moment >.<