chapter 24

BLACKSTONE
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''What are you doing right now?''Jay asked Riel.

''Selling those files were not in the plan.''Riel said.

''Is that why you are upset?''Jay said in playful manner.

''I suppose you are still in love with him.''Jay indicated Woohyun.

Woohyun was slouching,one hand holding his sides.Bloods seeped through his fingers.

''You are not as weak as I see.''Jay spoke to Woohyun.

''It's over for you.''Riel pushed the gun beside Jay's temple again.

''Stop that.You are going to blow us off.He is holding a pressure detonator.''Woohyun said to Riel.

''Also,you are not as dumb as I can see.''Jay lifted his left hand that held the detonator.

''You son of a .''Riel cursed.

 

 

[Somewhere]

''Are you sure this is the right one?''Sunggyu asked Sungyeol.

''Based on my knowledge and experience...''Sungyeol said.

''Cut it,so can you defuse the bomb?''Sunggyu asked.

''I can try.''Sungyeol said.

''What do you mean you can try?This place is going to blow up if you fail to defuse it.''Sunggyu said.

''Okay.Okay.Give me some time.''Sungyeol inspected the bomb.

''How long?''Sunggyu asked.

''Stop asking questions and maybe I can defuse it faster.''Sungyeol was annoyed.

''Sungyeol is working on it.Once this one dead,the rest of the bomb will be too.We will go in then.Wait for my signal.''Sunggyu informed the others through his radio.

 

 

[Inside the room]

''Now,put the gun away from me will you?''Jay said.

Riel glanced at Woohyun and the latter nodded as a sign to asked Riel to do as Jay said.

The moment Riel pull her gun away,Jay snatched it from her and shot Woohyun's leg once.Woohyun immediately dropped to the ground and groaned.

''What are you doing?''Riel ran towards Woohyun to help him apply a pressure on his leg.

''You shouldn't have provoke me.''Jay said and marched towards Woohyun.He grabbed a fist of Woohyun's hair and dragged him outside.

''Stop it.Stop it.''Riel tried to release Woohyun but end up getting hit with the gun at the back of her head.

''Tie her up too.''Jay ordered the guards.

''Woohyun.''Jihyun called his brother once she saw Jay dragged him infront of the monitor.His brother was a wrecked.

''I am tired of getting disappo

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I did some editing on the foreword.I want to declare that this is woogyu fic.
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closedbook7 #1
Chapter 27: To be honest authornim, your concept was good but its execution was not at all up to the mark. I want to give my sincere opinion on this work of yours, which had the potential to be a worth reading story. I feel this story lacked a lot of crucial scenes or you can say elements to show the developing emotions of Wooggyu as well as it needs a smooth transition from one incident to another. A lot of things were happening haphazardly in a short period of time and thus everything felt too rushed, as if I watched a whole movie in 3x speed.. Most importantly, I feel that there was little to almost no chemistry between Woohyun and Sunggyu. I hope that you take my words in a positive way and try to improve your work. I actually anticipated from a long time to read this story after subscribing it, but saved this story for reading it leisurely, you know like taking my time to enjoy each chapter. I think my expectation was too high which indeed resulted in a huge disappointment and I apologize for that. Please don't be dishearten by my comment. I just want to help you by pointing out the mistakes. I hope to read your better works in the future. Till then stay strong and keep writing ! fighting!!
hamstree_baodeer #2
Chapter 27: When i saw the description, i'm so interested with your story. Read it in one go. But, forgive me before for this long sentences.

Your work lack of many things. There're plot hole, the times didn't flow so i can't feel what you're gonna say. When a supposed chapter hold a tragedy in one or two part, you divided it to many chapters. It's annoying to press next button everytime i'm going to swim the story. Beside plot hole, the progress of character are lack too. Like, Sunggyu's feeling to Woohyun. There aren't any sentence that show his, then on last chapter Riel know his feelings and Woohyun started opened up? They're not even converse beside the mission-related.

I'm not going to say your work are bad, since the idea itself are great. I know what you want to write, how some scene supposed to mean, but the way you describe it aren't good enough. Even your punctuation mark weren't used like it supposed to--i love spaces.

I hope you want to made some changes. Like adding the romance more bluntly, add another scene to connect the situation. You can combine those super short chapter to a long one and made it worth to read. I know, as a writer you already do your best, and i'm just some rude readers. Heck, even i can't write something in english with good grammars, since i'm not native. God knows how many errors this one comment had. But, isn't that what your reader for? To critics and show where you lack? I'm not going to say the story are amazing, i barely enjoy it. I know it's so rude of me.

I'm sorry if my words are harsh. I'm not intended to offend you. I'm just disappointed that the story didn't match my expectation. With such a good idea and description, i'm hoping to meet a really great story. But after i'm read it, i can't help this long rant.

Once again, i'm sorry for my words. I'm not offending you, really. Your idea is great, and i love it. I hope you won't get mad.
tinydream #3
Chapter 5: Am confused like.. Seriously confused. But i'll keep to reading it~
Foreverins #4
Chapter 27: It is the last chapter..thanks for writing this amazing story.hope you will write a sequel for this..
About the woogyu journey.
Simran20 #5
Chapter 27: It's already end.good job author nim. Hope you will continue with more fics.
peychee457 #6
Chapter 27: ahh that was nice! how did Sunggyu fall for him though? haha
reader_28 #7
Chapter 27: aww.. it's already end???
RaniahMing #8
Chapter 27: So "woogyu" is the ending! Thanks i enjoy this fic.
Inspiritwer_11 #9
Chapter 27: Thanks author-nim....it's a great story......
Foreverins #10
Chapter 26: This is getting more and more interesting..can't wait to see what will happen next.
I hope Hyun will be okay.
Will be waiting for the next update
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