chapter 23

BLACKSTONE
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''Hyung,they have take control over the medical wing.The Commander is talking with the leader of Black Iris right now.''Sungjong informed him.

''I thought...''Sunggyu was speechless.

''What?Don't tell me you believe that I would change my mind after hearing about what actually happen to my parents and brother.''Riel said.

''You..''Sunggyu grabbed onto Riel's collar.

Before Sunggyu could beat Riel up,a few soldier came into the room.

''Captain,we have order from the Commander to take her to him.''One of the soldiers told Sunggyu and the others went to get Riel.

''What's happening right now?''Sunggyu asked the soldier.

Suddenly,Taehyun barged into the room.

''How could you do this?I have enough.''Taehyun pushed past the soldiers that were holding Riel and roughly leaned her on the wall behind her.The soldiers struggled to separate Taehyun and Riel.

''If anything happen to my brother and sister,I will make sure you suffer.''Taehyun threatened.Sungjong barged into the room and helped Sunggyu to pry away the soldiers from Teahyun meanwhile Taehyun had a talk with her.

''You and your family are going to pay.Now you know the fear of losing someone dear to you.''Riel said.

''Take me instead,you lost your brother.I understand.There is no need to harm both of them.I will give you my life to compensate your brother life.''Taehyun suddenly offered.

''No,I am more interested in Woohyun.''Riel announced.

''Riel,he loves you.''Taehyun said.

''He loves me?No!If he truly loves me,he would tell me the truth about what happened to my brother.''Riel shouted.

''You think Woohyun know about it.He is the same with you.He only read about what is on the report.''Taehyun said.

''You are lying.Jay told me that Woohyun knew about it.Of course he knew about it,that is why he feel guilty about it.''Riel said.

''You actually believe what he said.Yes,he does feel guilty but not because of what happened to your brother.He feel guilty leaving you alone when the attack took place.''Taehyun said.

''Jihyun and I are the only ones who see how much Woohyun beat himself over it.You should know this,Jay is only using you to break in here.''Taehyun added.

More soldiers barged into the room.Sunggyu,Sungjong and Taehyun were restrained.The soldiers then took Riel away.

 

 

[In the medical wing]

Woohyun slowly opened his eyes.His whole body felt heavy due to the sedative.

''Well,well.Look who's finally up.''Jay spoke but Woohyun's vision was still cloudy.

''Who are you?''Woohyun asked

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I did some editing on the foreword.I want to declare that this is woogyu fic.
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closedbook7 #1
Chapter 27: To be honest authornim, your concept was good but its execution was not at all up to the mark. I want to give my sincere opinion on this work of yours, which had the potential to be a worth reading story. I feel this story lacked a lot of crucial scenes or you can say elements to show the developing emotions of Wooggyu as well as it needs a smooth transition from one incident to another. A lot of things were happening haphazardly in a short period of time and thus everything felt too rushed, as if I watched a whole movie in 3x speed.. Most importantly, I feel that there was little to almost no chemistry between Woohyun and Sunggyu. I hope that you take my words in a positive way and try to improve your work. I actually anticipated from a long time to read this story after subscribing it, but saved this story for reading it leisurely, you know like taking my time to enjoy each chapter. I think my expectation was too high which indeed resulted in a huge disappointment and I apologize for that. Please don't be dishearten by my comment. I just want to help you by pointing out the mistakes. I hope to read your better works in the future. Till then stay strong and keep writing ! fighting!!
hamstree_baodeer #2
Chapter 27: When i saw the description, i'm so interested with your story. Read it in one go. But, forgive me before for this long sentences.

Your work lack of many things. There're plot hole, the times didn't flow so i can't feel what you're gonna say. When a supposed chapter hold a tragedy in one or two part, you divided it to many chapters. It's annoying to press next button everytime i'm going to swim the story. Beside plot hole, the progress of character are lack too. Like, Sunggyu's feeling to Woohyun. There aren't any sentence that show his, then on last chapter Riel know his feelings and Woohyun started opened up? They're not even converse beside the mission-related.

I'm not going to say your work are bad, since the idea itself are great. I know what you want to write, how some scene supposed to mean, but the way you describe it aren't good enough. Even your punctuation mark weren't used like it supposed to--i love spaces.

I hope you want to made some changes. Like adding the romance more bluntly, add another scene to connect the situation. You can combine those super short chapter to a long one and made it worth to read. I know, as a writer you already do your best, and i'm just some rude readers. Heck, even i can't write something in english with good grammars, since i'm not native. God knows how many errors this one comment had. But, isn't that what your reader for? To critics and show where you lack? I'm not going to say the story are amazing, i barely enjoy it. I know it's so rude of me.

I'm sorry if my words are harsh. I'm not intended to offend you. I'm just disappointed that the story didn't match my expectation. With such a good idea and description, i'm hoping to meet a really great story. But after i'm read it, i can't help this long rant.

Once again, i'm sorry for my words. I'm not offending you, really. Your idea is great, and i love it. I hope you won't get mad.
tinydream #3
Chapter 5: Am confused like.. Seriously confused. But i'll keep to reading it~
Foreverins #4
Chapter 27: It is the last chapter..thanks for writing this amazing story.hope you will write a sequel for this..
About the woogyu journey.
Simran20 #5
Chapter 27: It's already end.good job author nim. Hope you will continue with more fics.
peychee457 #6
Chapter 27: ahh that was nice! how did Sunggyu fall for him though? haha
reader_28 #7
Chapter 27: aww.. it's already end???
RaniahMing #8
Chapter 27: So "woogyu" is the ending! Thanks i enjoy this fic.
Inspiritwer_11 #9
Chapter 27: Thanks author-nim....it's a great story......
Foreverins #10
Chapter 26: This is getting more and more interesting..can't wait to see what will happen next.
I hope Hyun will be okay.
Will be waiting for the next update
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