Maybe not Temporary

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Love & Dream

Dream & Love

Which of the two holds the higher priority?

 

 

Foreword

Inspired by the prompt:

He was always here one moment and gone the next. Some nights, I found myself holding him tightly to sleep, afraid that he might leave again in the morning.

 

i shouldn't be here and be doing this but i had to.

this is my one-shot entry for Vanillasushi's one-shot writing contest, BLOSSOM ROADS. there's not much time left until the deadline but still, i strongly encourage any of you guys to give it a shot.

again, it will be a sekai fic, as usual. i was thinking of having an OC instead but i just couldn't do it lol.

and again, angsttttttttttt. i just can't live without it, can i?

anyhow, i hope you guys enjoy it!

 

cover credit to TWO MOONS

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Sunnys103 #1
Chapter 1: i hope that he stayed...after all it was a special date for both if them
vanillasushi #2
Chapter 1: I love how realistic this is. There's always going to be compromise in a relationship and it will always only be able to stretch only to a certain point, it's just a matter of how well one can keep up with it, and how much the other can give up to keep their relationship together. We will never know what Kai's decision will be, but it is a reminder that he HAS the decision to stay, or to go.

There isn't much for me to critique on! There isn't any grammar mistakes (or at least none I could find), but I did realise a bit of a change between tenses. They're not obvious changes, but its still there. Though they don't hinder my understanding of the story! Another thing I wanted to address was how you finished it? Or rather, how you structured it? Because it was a single dialogue with a no-named speaker, it was a little confusing on who had been the one saying it, and also HOW. I knew it was the coach, so the WHO wasn't that mind boggling, but it was the fact that the dialogue came right after their alone scene in the morning, so it felt to me like the coach was there too, or something. It's not that important though, since we get the gist of it anyway. :) I really like the subtle fluff though!

Thank you for joining Blossom Roads! I hope that through this contest, you'll feel more motivated to keep writing and to keep improving! It's always nice to see writers blooming more and more :) Good luck in your future stories!

xoxo
Seenaa #3
Chapter 1: Nuuuuuuu jongin don't go :((( but well like you said he probably did and i would be a crying mess if that happened ㅠㅠㅠㅠ
Kai_maaya #4
Chapter 1: This was so sad but do cute
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