Chapter 1: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO JIMIN ;-; its wonderful how you showed Jimin's feelings here ;-; can there be like a sequel of this story?? Like what happens after this a little more in detail?? anyway great story ^-^
Chapter 1: MORE PLEASE! At least a more detailed version or like an epilogue. I really want to know what happens with Jimin after the whole vkook thing. Poor Jimin, he didn't deserve to be frozen out like that :(( Really good to be your first time! But maybe a bit more detailed? It would help the readers get the full picture :D
It's quite a short story, but neithertheless good. I like the way you portrayed Jimin's feelings about the complicate relationship, but I wanted to know what Taehyung thought soooo bad (you know, when he looked at him with the guilt in his eyes and all). Maybe you could write a sequel? Or just do some spin-offs that explain some scenes with more details xD Nevertheless I enjoyed it :D
Chapter 1: Do you take feedback/critic? If not then scroll to the last part :)
Okay so all the compliments about the story will be the last thing mention, meanwhile lets talk about the story from an objective perspective. Your writing skills are good and you have a varied language but sometimes you mix up present tense and past tense — which is not bad, I mean I did that all the time when I started writing. Maybe it's your style (idk), although it's technically not correct it's always okay to roll with your own style. You do you girl XD
Also, I would've wanted the story to be longer, you know, more drama, more details and just an insight of what Jungkook thought of the situation. Perhaps even what Jimin would do to try to solve the it (maybe team up with Taehyung? He seemed understanding) or if he would just give up on his friendship/secret crush.
Either way, it is a good story with a good idea backing it up. It was sad but also entertaining somehow. Keep up with the good work [Insert thumbs up emoji]
Chapter 1: This was so heartbreaking... losing the only true friend you have. At the moment, I can't believe Jungkook just threw away his best friend like that. I feel like he knew he was hurting Jimin, since he should be able to notice the change in his actions and words, but chose to ignore it. Since jimin adored him so much, i have a feeling jimin spoiled jungkook with so much and that everthing he wants in life is just handed to him, and he became ungrateful. I doubt taehyung knows any of this, but it seems like Jungkook still has a small friendship going on with jimin not because he likes him, but because of the benefits he gets from doing so.
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