A Review From Linlin Vito @ UD

Story Title: Reliance
Author: Mariel D.
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/valentina_02/
Status: One shot//Completed
Reviewer: Ms. McFartPants (Linlin Vito)

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Title: 5/5
: The title fits the plot perfectly. It's quite appealing and somehow, I'm wishing to read more..

Forewords: 8/10
: I'm not impressed with the forewords. Yeah, it showed a small preview about the plot and the character's points of views but I think it needs something.. I just can't simply point it out.

First Impression: 9/10
: I was smiling when I first saw this fanfic. The poster really attracts me and the same with the background. But then when I saw that it was a one-shot, I told myself "Aw. Only a little GuiLun moments?" but it was still fine with me.

Plot/Story line: 13/15
: The story line was good, and I didn't see that part were Chun mentions to Guigui that the plane was borrowed. Good job on that one! The thing about Aaron being a pilot and he having a divorce with his wife is quite unique but I can't seem to understand why Guigui wasn't prove innocent.

Flow: 3/5
: I think the flow made me misunderstood something. Wait.. I'm thinking about it. I don't know how should I describe the flow. For me, it's quite fast but I think it's too slow; so I guess I'll give you 3..

Creativity/Originality: 9/10
: I love how your mind works, my friend! A pilot having a divorce? It's 99% original? This is the first time I've read something like this. Good job! :D

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 14/15
: Your mistakes are not that noticeable. I saw some wrong usage of punctuation marks but it's still good.

Writing Style: 8/10
: It's good. Nothing else to say..

Characterization: 8/10
: I love their characters and the way they played their roles. :D

Communication with Readers: 4/5
: I didn't feel something while reading it. So.. I guess it's a 4.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
: Enjoyed reading it! :D

Subtotal: 86/100

Bonus: 4/5
: Miss you, girl! ^^ xoxoxo

Total: 90/100

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Wow! What a High scroe!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH LinLin!! hihi. Xie Xie Ni and Wo ai ni le!! xD

August 29, 2009