Title : 4.5/5

Your title is super simple and straightforward which actually reflects your story,and I'm talking about the concept here.Title reflects the direction of your story but I don't expect the emotion you put in the story which is a great surprise element,in my opinion.

Graphics : 4/5

You doesn't have a proper graphic so I'll just replace it with the relevancy of your story with reality.

I think the emotions are being delivered well.I kinda get the sense of reality when I'm reading,how you being precise about how people can feel when they are in certain situation or problems. 

Description : 6/10

You doesn't have much words for your description but I have to praise you for its ambiguity that mislead me.Actually,I still don't understand the relevancy of the description with your story.

Plot : 22/25

Yep,you nailed it.I can see the development of your plot.I love how you make it the alternate POV which works well even if it can be confusing.What I don't really get was that how Luhan was saved by YoonA and did YoonA get hurt by her first love or what?I maybe get that Luhan might took an interest in YoonA,maybe more than a friend and that he tried to help her to be bright a girl but I'm still confused by the part where YoonA said that he shouldn't love her when he doesn't know her.Is that the same he that made her stop believing in love?I guess at the end YoonA finally jumps right?

Characters : 24/25

Flawless.You perfectly described your character's personality which is a bonus for you.There might be some slight confusion on how they become like that but everything else is perfect since sometimes you doesn't need to explain everything right?

Grammar : 19/20

Your grammar and vocab is nothing but nearly perfect.There is this teeny-weeny mistake where YoonA shred the paper,shreds of papers scatter in the air and yoona had brutally tore the envelope and tossed it in the air...you can change it to as YoonA had...Other than that it's okay,fine actually.

Enjoyment : 8/10

I enjoyed your story.No,I'm not kidding.Actually my jaw almost dropped when I first read your sentences.I was like,your vocab is no kidding and your grammar...phew...It's actually hard to write one shot,plus yours is simple and short,because sometimes the emotion is not there but you did it,haks.

Total : 87.5/100

Others : Overall it's an enjoyable and a superb story.Simplicity plays the biggest role but you made it work by putting in the emotions nicely and the words that perfectly described a situation.They made your story wonderful and even though I'm usually being strict about details and I gotta admit that you lack some,but still its a roundly perfect story.Good luck with your future one-shots and sorry for this delay,never thought that life was going to happen to me,^^.