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Happy Little Pill

Romcom ::: taeliaa ::: Title [7/10] Pemilihan Kata 3.5/5 Happy Little Pill? For a moment, I thought of this one song with the same title. Ha. Pada pandangan pertama, saya tertarik dengan tajuk ini. It just feels right. No other reason why, or how. Markah ditolak sikit kerana tajuk ini kedengaran klise dan dua, ia mengingatkan seseorang dengan lagu Troye Sivan. Relevan 3.5/5 Half-half. Secara keseluruhannya, tajuk ini mencerminkan watak Baek lebih.  Description [14/15] Pengenalan 4/5 Intro taeliaa memang comel. My toes are bounching on its own. Good job. Cumanya, ia kelihatan seperti satu perenggan cerita. Description with 2-3 lines is good enough. Flow& Pacing 5/5 Tiada isu besar di sini. Everything went smoothly. Tema 5/5 Semestinya romcom + schoollife. Plot [18/30] Keaslian 5/10 Klise tu memang lah klise, but it a good way. In a way that making one's heart to flutter and pained. Good job, taeliaa! Perkembangan: 1st 8/10 First part mostly concerning Jung Irene, who falls in love with a classmate, playmate, and perhaps, soulmate? Hee. Saya suka interaksi dua karakter ini. Rasa macam saya dah kembali ke alam persekolahan pula. Setiap babak dipersembahkan dengan santai, tetapi on spot, tidak over, dan paling penting, ia tidak bersifat redundant/ dragging. Each scene is catalyst to the next's.  Well done.  2nd 5/10 Fasa kedua ialah peleraian konflik. Yup, we're currently at this phase. Our broken-hearted Irene has redeemed her love. Tak banyak halangan tuk dua insan itu bersatu namun saya tak rasa ianya amat berkurangan walaupun di dalam hati, I was anticipating for more sufferings. 3rd /10 Cerita ini belum sampai ke fasa ini lagi. Characterization [22/30] Perkembangan 6/10 Irene dan Baekhyun ialah dua karakter yang memainkan peranan ' tug of war'. Cinta remaja yang klise. Tidak keterlaluan kala
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