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Author: nightlock08

Reviewer: infinite_infinity20

Date: 11/14/2015

            

REVELARE

Title 10/10 

The title is very unique! I have not once seen the title "Revelare". But I saw that revelare means to unveil. Is it going to unveil a secret?

Foreword/Decription 8/10

I loved how there was a mother that had to leave her child with a new family. Was that about Ji Won? But I think you shouldn't put that in the foreword. Maybe you should put it in a chapter or maybe write another story about that because I am not clear about it.

Grammar/Spelling 12/15

So, you make mistakes now and then. You forgot a lot of commas and etc. The mistakes aren't so serious but I feel like getting a beta re