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Author: fusionspeaks

Reviewer: fantabulously

Date: 11/14/2015

 

 

 

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The Northern Lights

Title 10/10

The title you used for this oneshot, "The Northern Lights" fits the story very well, because the aurora borealis is a big part of the plot. 

Description/Foreword 10/10

The description was really nice, explaining the Northern Lights to everyone, telling the readers about who Byun Baekhyun was. It really got my attention.

Grammar/Spelling 14/15

Your spelling's great and so are the words that you used, such as "mesmerizing" or "sentiments". They aren't used much in fanfictions now-a-days. Your punctuation needs a little assistance though because there's supposed to be a space after a period or comma. Overall in this section you did great for someone who's first language isn't English. 

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