Chapter 165: Thank you so much for you review, it really helped me a lot to see my errors. The thing about the sentence contruction I've been told a lot before as well and I know I'm really bad a it, I never really take time to double check my stories or proof read them which I should start doing now. I will try to correct all of the mistakes you pointed out and for next time I will try to be more careful about it.
Also, yes english is not my mother language, and as for all the question left unanswered I will try to add them to the story. I wrote this on a couple of hours for a contest so I didn't take a lot of time to be more descriptive since I had a deadline but now I will add more details. Hopefully you will like it better once I'm done with all fo that.
Again thank you so much for this amazing review it was really helpfull. I shall now get a beta reader~ :3
Chapter 164: Hey there, firstly thank you so so much for the thorough review (seriously, I am so thankful that you actually managed to read through my crap at such a detailed level) - your feedback has been so constructive it really helps to open my mind a lot about writing.
I am going to skip past the score because I don't wanna be distracted slash disappointed by it cause I'm an perfectionist, and focus on your content.
I guess the most 'lacking' part of my story would be the part on 'conflicts' but to be honest i'm still a bit unsure how to consider it an essential part of a story.
YES the character part is the biggest headache I have and I almost always play it off as Eunhae being the dumb and even dumber that they are and I even tried to squeeze in a bit of how "different" they touch and sound in the later chapters as Donghae and Hyukjae instead of Aiden and Spencer. Between me and you, I did NOT mean for this story to be mysterious, I almost wanted it to be apparent to readers from the start who Aiden and Spencer was but damnit I dont know what happened and all this mystery thing came about but I guess it's all fun.
Seriously all the above is just rant and me giving you a long thank you for the long deep review (and omg, you are too kind to me on the language aspect, thank you)
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im sorry, i'm not sure if its just me but the end of the rules where your password is overlaps with the Q&A sections, so i cant read it =(
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Chapter 163: thx for the review! your review will help me a lot in the future. i like your comment actually. i really need an honest review in order to improve myself in writing. when the story is done, i'll send it again for review. thx again! *bows* (spoiler) actually, sehun really mixed the banana milk into kris's fav milk. i was thinking of sehun's (lol) but i'm a male myself, i couldn't imagine how i gonna drink that. XD
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