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EllisKambook
#1
Chapter 162: thank you for the review over my story! Thank you for the honest review, & have taken into account everything I need to work on & hope to offer more in my writing in the future (:
KangminBread
#2
Chapter 152: i want to participate in the giveaway:
Username: KangminBread
Story title: Little Heart
One-shot link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/885679/3/kangminbread-s-one-shot-collection-kangmin-kyusung-yekyu
Genre: , angst, AU, slice of life
upvote/subscribe: yes
blogpost link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1005249

on another note i am in dire need of a beta-reader, would any of you know anyone that could help me out?
REBEL4LIFE
#3
Chapter 152: Username: REBEL4LIFE
Profile Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/249688
Story Title: Enemy Are Closer
One Shot Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/918840
Genre's: Freindship, slightofangst, romance
Upvote / Subscribe?: Yes
Blog Post Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1005004
YoungRi95 #4
Hiya, author-nim ! \(^o^)
I'm sorry for bothering you, but may I know where can I get the form for the review?

Tbh,, It really is my first time asking a review for my story, (TvT)
would you mind to help me?
*Gomawo !*
KaihleeLo
#5
Chapter 161: Picking up~! Aigoo this was the review I was looking for~ It was very helpful and I feel like someone truly understand my story (but it could be because of that relation to The Walking Dead xD) For the title I didn't put "The" in, at first I thought about it and wanted to put it in but I thought it would be too similar to "The Walking Dead". But with the 'the' I can see how it'll sound better xD As for the 'genre', I mean I would have added more zombies' scenes but for some reason I wanted to lean more on the angst and brotherhood side? I'm a er for brotherhood genres xD But I can see how and why zombie readers would want more gory scenes~ So I understood what you meant and I especially love TWD and Resident Evil as well (did you play the games on stations? xD) As for the mi-use of comas. To me I see commas as something that makes a certain sentence 'dramatic' and whatnot. So I don't usually think bout it being improperly use for proper grammar purposes. And I'm just not with semi-colons period xD So thanks for the helpful tips~ English isn't my second language and I honestly talk funny in real life anywho, but I'm glad you found my reading easy xD I'm not a very creative person and my vocabularies are limited so >.< I'll work hard on that! As for the disallow selection, it was for a review shop a while back that only reviewed disallow text-selection so I disabled it~ PS. Don't read the sequel. You'll be disappointed xD Thank you thank you~
cerberos #6
Chapter 152: Hello, I'm participating again :D

Username: cerberos

Profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/587946

Story name: Farewell

Genre: angst

Subbed/Upvoted: Yes/Yes

Oneshot post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/918394

Blog post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1003803
xiuminbaozi99
#7
Chapter 160: Pick Up!

Thanks for the review, about the tags, I can't really think of any other tags other than romcom, what other tags do you suggest to use?
iIIicit #8
Chapter 159: Picked up!!!
Thank you so much for the review, it helped a lot!
This is the first time I've received such a detailed review and it was amazing wow. it helped me pin point the parts that i need to improve on, like expanding on Kyungsoo's point of view, consistency with Jongin's name. I'm glad you liked my writing style! I've tried to improve it so i'm happy that it has changed positively <3
i upvoted and will credit soon <3 !!
EllisKambook
#9
Chapter 158: Phew, you have no idea how much my heart was racing when I saw my name under the TOC list...this is the first time this story has been reviewed so I really had no idea what I was expecting haha.

You got me on the poster part, I'm actually looking for the right shop that has the right touch to do my poster. I'll take your suggestions when it comes to the usual "anything else" part on the fill out forms haha. I also changed my foreword to your version, so I hope you don't mind :3

When coming into these reviews, I am actually more interested on my character development/grammar so thank you for being so honest about that part. I'm learning little by little to try & explain characters out more fully, so hopefully I can get a character from point A to B without the "how did that happen" part (like how you pointed out with Krystal). With the grammar, I actually did have a beta-reader for this one (my co-author) and I english isn't her first language, rather it is mine. (funny, huh?) I can't get in contact with her, so I was wondering if you knew any beta-readers that I could get to do that?

Okay, wow, sorry for the long comment! I'm glad you enjoyed the story... Thanks for reviewing my story & I can't wait for the next one (:
bae-jinki
#10
Chapter 157: first, I would like to thank you for taking time to read my story and review it. second, I am extremely grateful for your honest review. this was exactly what I was looking for and I'm glad you were the person to do it. as I'm continuing with this story, nayeon's character development was something I'm currently dealing with so I will take each and every one of your advise and put it to use. to be honest it kind of conflicting for me since I want to please my readers and also develop her. however I will manage to do both in the future (:
cerberos #11
Chapter 152: hello there reviewer-nim!
I'm interested in participating your giveaway. I have sent the form, subbed & upvoted, and made a blog post about the contest. Please let me know should you find any requirement still not fulfilled. Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
cerberos #12
Chapter 152: Username: cerberos

Profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/587946

Story name: What They Don't Talk When They Talk About Loss

Genre: angst

Subbed/Upvoted: Yes/Yes

Oneshot post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/897575

Blog post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1003803
babyzchen
#13
Chapter 152: ah~ how I hope I can join this...
But my laptop is broken*sobs*
I hope I can join this maybe this month, I really want to join~
sehunnisaturnip #14
Username: sehunnisaturnip

Profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/920583

Story name: Forecast of Snow

Genre: angst, drama,

Subbed/Upvoted: Yes

Oneshot post: https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/915923

Blog post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1002306
sehunnisaturnip #15
can i submit more that one, oneshot for the contest? like can i use the same blog post and submit another story?
sehunnisaturnip #16
Chapter 152: Username: sehunnisaturnip

Profile link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/920583

Story name: Maybe It Was Love

Genre: angst, sad

Subbed/Upvoted: Yes

Oneshot post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/915256/maybe-it-was-love-angst

Blog post: http://www.asianfanfics.com/blog/view/1002306
zeroto61
#17
why am i not on the list?
hahahayi
#18
Chapter 152: totally joining, but when will the giveaway end?
Hellody
#19
Chapter 152: Wahh! I wanna join! Asap when I post le blog post ;) quick question: the story can't participate if it is participating for another contest, right?