Title: 8 / 10 points

Unique and evokes questions. Pretty eye-catching. I like how they symbolise Krystal. -thumbs up-

Appearance: 9 / 10 points

The poster is gorgeous. Monochrome to represent the heavy plot, the snowflake and the main characters. Contrasting backgrounds for the top left corner and bottom right. A snowflake at the end of the word; the font is fitting. It's easy to read the text. I like the poster. Even their clothes suit the theme. Great!

Well spread paragraphs, no dialogue were mashed up in one paragraph from different people. It's easy on the eyes.

Description and Foreword: 13 / 15 points

Your description is more of a foreword, but doesn't matter. The story seems interesting and has me forming questions about it. You gave an explanation to why Krystal is a 'snowflake' too.

Characterization: 9 / 10 points

Their characters seemed pretty good. Stuck throughout.

Plot: 7 / 10 points

It's not really unique, there are quite a number of assassin fics and about them kidnapping people. But it's pretty unique in the way the kidnapped isn't the main character's love interest.

Flow: 9 / 10 points

The flow is good. Sometimes it goes kinda off though, but so far so good.

Grammar and Spelling: 14 / 25 points

There were a lot of mistakes. Tenses and plurals mainly. You switched between present and past often, and sometimes you forgot your plurals. Some words were stuck together (typos, but yeah), and some words didn't belong.

Bonus: 8 / 10 points

Jjsadkfhl the ending- the feels. I love how you related the final lines to the title. I quite enjoyed reading this, it's pretty fun. Awesome.

Comments:

This story was pretty interesting. It didn't move too slowly, it moved rather quickly actually, but it wasn't too hasty. Great work!

Score: 77 / 100 : C