Title: 7 / 10 points

The title didn't really catch my eye. It only gave me the impression of two people with different personalities, which isn't all that uncommon. It did, however, make me wonder what you meant by opposites by the description, so kudos to that. Also, I think the addition of the hyphens were a good idea. Makes it a little more appealing?

Appearance: 6 / 10 points

Your cover poster is neat, but it doesn't really appeal to me. It's cute, but it doesn't fit the story's plot. The story's plot is heavier from what I've read on the description, which the second poster conveys. The background is genre neutral (if that's the word), which is good.

The paragraphs were neatly spread and there weren't huge blocks of text (thanks goodness quq). There were points when the font changed along with the size before returning to the original. Certain paragraphs contain more than one person's dialogue, which can be quite confusing to readers.

Description and Foreword: 12 / 15 points

Your description made me curious about the story, good job. Your foreword was simple and quick.

Characterization: 8 / 10 points

Their personalities stuck throughout. Though there's just something bugging me; why does everyone think Key is stupid? Your characterisation of him doesn't make him look stupid. Why does Eunjung care that Key is taking Hana away? I understand if it's because she isn't done with Hana, but yeah.

But then again, Key hasn't appeared for a long time, so I can't judge him yet.

Plot: 7 / 10 points

It's not very unique, but it's kind of different. Your plot has some cliche qualities.

Flow: 9 / 10 points

The flow is good. However, unnecessary information does disrupt it.

Grammar and Spelling: 17 / 25 points

In the beginning, everything seemed fine. Starting from chapter two, the punctuation and tenses were becoming odd and mixed (the tenses weren't that bad though), and in the third chapter, I couldn't figure out who 'I' was when they were in the nurse's office. There were a lot of missing punctuations, especially when thoughts appeared.

Bonus: 4 / 10 points

I didn't really enjoy it, nor did I dislike it. It's good, but from the moment your punctuation went bad, I felt a little irked. But then, it's a good fic, and you seem to be doing well, so keep up the good work, kpopulzzangforever!

Comments:

I don't really have any comments other than what I've already written. Don't let the score pull you down, it's not a bad score. I wish you good luck on the contest! I'm sure you'll do well.

Score: 69 / 100 : C