Title appeal - [Is the title eye-catching?]: (6/10) : so the title is good! but honestly, it is used a lot and is now a bit cliche. there are many other titles that can be better, however, the title was still good! sorry if this was a bit harsh.

Foreword appeal - [Is the foreword/description eye-catching?]: (7/10) : the foreword was short and simple, something i really love as it leaves me wondering what will happen next. o u o. however i think it would be a lot better if there was a short introduction of characters however i know that you introduced them in the first chapter, but a little description would be sweet!, and not as many ellipses. c: and one more thing, the foreword was a tad bit cliche, but it's pretty much fine!

Originality - [Has the reader read anything similar? Is the idea well thought-out?]: (10/15) : yes, i have read something similar. it may be completely coincidental, but i have read something similar. there are also a lot of fics with the same story line but most of them aren't k-pop related! i have read a story on aff with a similar plot though, so sorry :C. the idea is well thought out though! you didn't make it that easy to guess what was going to happen next, but i could guess what was going to happen next in some places. i liked it though! 

Grammar/Vocabulary - [Were there many spelling mistakes? Was the sentence used correctly? Did the author use sophistcated alternatives to common words?]: (28/40) : so i know that english isn't your first language, so let me just say that i'm really sorry if that was completely harsh, you can hate me forever. ;u;. there were many spaces that were used too many times, but then there were places where you forgot to put the space. for example: youdid this/ignorned it , since etc. one thing that really bugs me is when people don't use spaces properly. another thing that bugs me is use of TOO many ellipses, not needed commas and words that need an apostrophe. and you did all of them, so you should proof read next time, and also put a little note about english not being your first language. your vocabulary was verd, but it could be better! some adjectives were really second grade. :c. if you ever need synonyms, just search it up and they'll give you a bunch! keep working on both your punctuation and your vocabulary more and you will be really good. :)

Characterization - [Are the characters relatable? Has the author taken time to develop the characters?]: (8/10) : the characters were very well developed, as you took time to tell us about each character. however, they're not technically how they are in real life. they are in some ways, but also in other situations, i could never imagine that person doing that thing. but this is your fanfic and you have the power to change your characters to anyone you want to! all in all, good job with the characters.

Development - [Pace, dialogue, plot]: (12/15) : the dialogue was great, i commend you on that, however this part of criticim that i'm just about to give half belongs in the grammar/vocab area. anyways, the way you structured your dialogue was a bit space taking and also was very confusing at times. i think you  could become tremendous if you put apostrophes, speech marks, commas, full stops and capital letters in the right places. the dialogue was quite smooth though, but it some cases it wasn't as smooth and i was wondering what was happening. the pace in the story is good though! it wasn't too fast or too slow most of the time but the parts where it was too fast/too slow were a bit hard to control so that's fine. o u o.