Title: 5/5

When I read your foreword and description, I saw that the tile before was 'Our Painful Past'

I'm glad you changed it since that tile gave too much information about what it about to happen

and with 'Our Past' the readers will start asking themselves, "What's their past? I am going to read this to find out!"

They will start thinking that because the til made them curious and a title that enhances the curiousity

of readers is a great title, so I give you a five over five! ^^

 

Description/Foreword: 10/10

The foreword and description is great! Everything that I saw in there was really good

and I applaud you for that and of course Yangmi or Raemi as I must say is really good in doing layouts :D

I even envy your layout for the foreword and description since I am not good in layouts (OMG!)

So your score is ten over ten! Good job!

 

Characterization: 14.5/15

You didn't describe a little bit more thoroughly your characters but once I read your

story, I already knew the personality of Minjoo, Hyunsik, Haejin etc..

 

Grammar: 13/15

Your grammar was okay so I applaud also the grammar editor MyraLeeya or Myra

and of course the author NurulAina. I think it would be better if you describe the feelings more

and use adjectives so the readers will know what is the feeling that the character is portraying like

sadly, happily and other adjectives. Please put also a space, I'll show you an example in what

I've noticed in your story

Example: (In chapter 1)

"Hyunsik-ah! Wake up! We're late for school!"I shouted when Hyunsik is still sleeping

But it should be...

"Hyunsik-ah! Wake up! We're late for school!" I shouted at Hyunsik when he was still sleeping.

Use the past tense

But overall, everything was okay! ^^

 

Originality: 7/10

Honestly, I've read a lot of stories just like your story since I love reading fanfiction

especially when it is about my biases. Yeah, when I read your foreword and description,

it did make me want to read it but as I read it, it was just the same with the other stories

that I've read. I'm not going to say the plot of the story here since I will be considered

a spolier :) Hehe!

 

Bonus: 5/5

Even though I don't like BTOB that much, but I do love their songs and some of the BTOB members

and I'm not that familiar with Hyunsik since I'm not updated with BTOB, but I like your story

so I will give your a five over five! :D

 

Total: 54.5/60

Good job! ^^ :D