TItle: Heartfelt Voice
Author: GreenGardenPop
Reviewer: Taeyeon417

Title: [8/10]

I thought it matched the story very well. It was just the right length and wasn't cliche. I deducted two points because it didn't really attract me and make me want to read the story.

Description and Foreward: [8/10]

The description hinted at the plot very well, however it didn't make me excited to read on.
The foreward was very good. I loved the poetic method you used. Not much too say about it.

Plot: [15/20]

I found the plot quite interesting. I liked how it combined supernatural aspects with everyday life. The "man from my dreams" concept is a bit overused but you made the plot your own but adding in the voice which was very nice. 
I also found your use of cliffhangers very nice and they often made me anxious to know more.
Overall it was very good but there were a few problems.
1. I did not like how in the beginning you kept it more to the realistic side, but then in the later chapters you added in way too much fantasy ideas without keeping it at the same pace.
2. I also felt that the whole "talking to herself" idea was a bit overlooked. The reactions from the others were okay but I think it should be a bit more intensified because she is practically screaming to no one. 

Flow: [12/15]

The flow was quite good. There were some grammar problems that made me feel a bit weird though. Also, like I mentioned in the "Plot" section, in the later chapters, I thought you should have spread out the usage of supernatural concepts. Other than that, the flow was great

Characterization: [14/15]

I could distinctly tell how Jiyeon was like and I loved the protective feeling the voice gave.

Mechanics: [17/20]

You did not have many grammar mistakes but there were some that threw off the flow a bit.

Chap 1: "the light moved foward along the wind blew a bit harder" Add a comma or something between "along" and "the".
Chap 1: "He wore a white long sleeve button shirt under  along overcoat with jet black round shades." If you're going to string a lot of adjectives, add commas to make the flow better.
Chap 1: I noticed you sometimes capitalize "mathematics". Don't, mathematics is a common noun.
Chap 2: "I was being watched within the trees I felt" You forgot a period. 
Chap 2: "So you're talking to yourself anymore." This sounds really weird.
Chap 5: "You better don't meet him," sounds a bit weird.
Chap 6: ""Now I remember you're that crazy girl,"" You're missing a comma between "you're" and "remember".
Chap 7: "His fingers gripped my wrist, halting me retreat." Halting MY retreat.

Also you sometimes repeat the same word which doesn't sound very good.

Appearance: [6/10]

The poster was a bit too plain for my taste. I liked how the rainbow coloring made a dreamy feeling without being overpowering but I would like to see a few more details, maybe something that could hint at the story plot? The words were fine but a little more variation would have been better. Also the background was simple and was not distracting, but did not relate to the the poster in any way.
Your formatting of text in the foreward and chapters were very good. I liked how you didn't use distracting colors that could overwhelm the eyes and kept the size reasonable.

Bonus: [2/5]

You said that English is not your first language and I was rather surprised at how well you were able to write! Kudos to you!

Total: 82/100 B

R/N: Your story is very good! I'm sorry if I seemed rather harsh. Also, you asked to focus on the characterization. I'm sorry if I didn't go deep enough into it. It was basically perfect so I didn't know what to say.